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some people say that the most important thing about being rich is that one has the opportunity to help others. To what extent do you agree and disagree?

some people say that the most important thing about being rich is that one has the opportunity to help others. V9DQ
In this present era, every person wants to be a prosperous man. therefore, it has been considered by certain individuals that the most significant aspect about being affluent that they have the chance to assist others. this essay intends to elaborate why I partially agree with this statement in upcoming paragraphs. To embark with. there are numerous factors of work which will be done by prosperous people. firstly, they can donate some money to charity domain to help poor people because there are lot of people who are not able to acquire fundamental necessities of life such as education, medical, food, and so on. Richer people can provide education to poor children who can not afford school fees. For instance, there is a being human foundation which is founded by Salman khan donate approximately 70% million rupees to underprivileged people in India. Moreover, during the time of disaster, rich personalities can help to the dwellers which also motivate others to work hard.
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been considered
by certain individuals that the most significant aspect about being affluent that they have the chance to assist others.
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agree
with this statement in upcoming paragraphs. To embark with.
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there
are numerous factors of work which will
be done
by prosperous
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people
.
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firstly
, they can donate
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some
money to charity domain to
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help
poor
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people
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because
there are
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lot of
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people
who are not able to acquire fundamental necessities of life such as education, medical, food, and
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so
on. Richer
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people
can provide education to poor children who can not afford school fees.
For instance
, there is a being human foundation which
is founded
by Salman khan donate approximately 70% million rupees to underprivileged
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people
in India.
Moreover
, during the time of disaster, rich personalities can
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help
to the dwellers which
also
motivate others to work
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IELTS essay some people say that the most important thing about being rich is that one has the opportunity to help others.

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
162 words
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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