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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. oALq
It is argued that the extinction of some kinds of plants and animals is the predominant environmental issue of a new era. Some people also believe many other threats are also there. This essay intends to analyze both the views along with my perspective. On the one hand, many species of plants and animals are on the verge of extinction. Numerous reasons for this statement are there but the predominant one is an expansion of industries. As the population is rising the number of consumers is also growing tremendously. Consequently, to satisfy the needs of such humongous demand, several industries are also escalating and habitats of native plants and animals are being destroyed to setting up the industries. Thus, many of the breeds of plants and animals are becoming a part of history and only can be seen in the books. Furthermore, there are many other factors such as deforestation and the growth of vehicles that are threatening the environment in many ways. Also, cutting trees has been a major factor in contributing the serious problems such as climate change. Moreover, the increase in the number of vehicles on the road also plays a vital role in polluting the environment. To explicate this, a survey was conducted by the Indian government in 2018 found that the number of four-wheelers is increased by 40 per cent as compared to 2015 and the pollution level significantly rose to 25% during the same period. This evidence proves that human beings are disturbing the ecosystem without knowing its ramifications. In the conclusion, while the expansion of industries is polluting the entire is polluting the environment in various ways and serious issues like deforestation and rise in pollution by the escalating number of vehicles taking place. I strongly believe that we are the reason for the distinction between species and other environmental problems.
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is argued
that the extinction of
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some
kinds of
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plants
and
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animals
is the predominant environmental issue of a new era.
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Some
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people
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many
other threats are
also
there. This essay intends to analyze both the views along with my perspective.

On the one hand,
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many
species of
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plants
and
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animals
are on the verge of extinction. Numerous reasons for this statement are there
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but
the predominant one is an expansion of
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industries
.
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As
the population is rising the
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number
of consumers is
also
growing
tremendously
.
Consequently
, to satisfy the needs of such humongous demand, several
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industries
are
also
escalating and habitats of native
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plants
and
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animals
are being
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destroyed
to setting up the
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industries
.
Thus
,
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many
of the breeds of
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plants
and
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animals
are becoming a part of history and
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only
can be
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seen
in the books.

Furthermore
, there are
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many
other factors such as deforestation and the growth of vehicles that are threatening the environment in
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many
ways.
Also
, cutting trees has been a major factor in contributing the serious problems such as climate
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change
.
Moreover
, the increase in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
number
of vehicles on the road
also
plays a vital role in polluting the environment. To explicate this, a survey
was conducted
by the Indian
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
in 2018 found that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
number
of
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four-wheelers
is increased
by 40 per cent as compared to 2015 and the pollution level
significantly
rose to 25% during the same period. This evidence proves that human beings are disturbing the ecosystem without knowing its ramifications.

In the conclusion, while the expansion of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
industries
is polluting the entire is polluting the environment in various ways and serious issues like deforestation and rise in pollution by the escalating
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
number
of vehicles taking place. I
strongly
believe that we are the reason for the distinction between species and other environmental problems.
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IELTS essay Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
308 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
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