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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Environment is one of the most wants. the living creature across the globe where this for all needs to be taken care in ways while the section of some society thinks that environment problem is due to loss of some particular spices of plants & animals, Others who assets that there are many other environment problems. however I vehementely agree The latter statement Because, problems are in numerous way let us delve deeper along with my opinion in the impending paragraphs. To begin with, The main Environment problem is only Because the loss of species of plants & animals has several reasons. First and fore most, the plants/ trees are being destroyed in the reason to construct buildings, Industries. To elaobrate, huge farming places being occupied by non-native land lords who are not specific in plantation They immediately destroy the land grown plants and construct the industries, where as few people hunt the forest animals and eat them to satisfy their demands. To explicate, The report on "Environmental Loss" carried by state commission officers, proves that there was 2000 acres of farming and was replaced totally by foreign land lords into an oil dispensery industries, on the another cite of example, the report done by Forest department shows that 21% of deer family are dissapeared because of hunting where these are in against law. on the contrary, The another important problem of environment loss has many different aspects. Primarily, Air pollution is the most effective problem In current situation Futhermore, Nowadays Every houses is filled with more than one car and more than three bikes where every people in a small family depend on their individual vehicles these and found in every where across the world while these leads more traffic and the Environment is effected because of gas produced by the vehicle pure air is getting polluted To substantiates, The survey conducted by Vehicle board Informs that over 50% of air is polluted by vehicle produced gases. In my opinion, I assert that our environment problem has many other causes as well. the most poisonous gases which are produced by Industries are also harming environment. To illustrate, the steel industries are burning coils to make them in desirable shapes they release extrinsive smoke while they heat it. To exemplify, The Environment act of 2020 clearly depicts that the 58% of gases produced by steel factories are effectively causing the environment deeply. To Encapsulate, it can be concluded that the Environmental problems of recent times has the Loss of particular species of plant & animals is also a get cause but not most effectively whereas they are still many problems which which are most harmful for environment can be yes at the times, based on my knowledge yes it is having a lot of other aspects which are still bothering the environment by polluting the air.
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the
living creature across the globe where this for all needs to
be taken
care in ways while the section of
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some
society
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thinks
that
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environment
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problem
is due to
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loss
of

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some
particular spices of plants &
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animals
, Others who assets that there are
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many
other
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environment
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problems
.
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however
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vehementely
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agree
The latter statement
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,
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problems
are in numerous way
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let
us delve deeper along with my opinion in the impending paragraphs.

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with, The main
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Environment
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is
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only
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Because
the
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loss
of species of plants &
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animals
has several reasons.
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and fore most, the

plants/ trees are being
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destroyed
in the reason to construct buildings,
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Industries
. To
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elaobrate
, huge farming places

being occupied
by non-native
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land lords
who are not specific in plantation

They immediately
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destroy
the land grown

plants and construct the
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industries
,
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where as
few
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people
hunt the forest
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animals
and eat them to satisfy their demands. To explicate, The report on
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"
Environmental Loss
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carried by state commission

officers, proves that
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there was 2000 acres
of farming and
was replaced
totally
by foreign
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land lords
into an oil
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dispensery
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industries
, on

the another cite of example, the report done

by Forest department
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shows
that 21% of deer family are
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dissapeared
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because
of hunting where these are in against law.

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on
the contrary, The another
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important
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problem
of
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environment
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loss
has
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many
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different
aspects.

Primarily
,
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Air
pollution is the most effective
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problem
In
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current
situation
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Futhermore
, Nowadays

Every
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houses
is filled
with more than one car and more than three bikes where every
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people
in a
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small
family depend on their individual
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vehicles
these and found in
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every where
across the world while these leads more traffic and the
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Environment
is effected
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because
of gas
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produced
by the
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vehicle
pure
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air
is getting polluted

To substantiates, The survey conducted by
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Vehicle
board Informs that over 50% of
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air
is polluted
by
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vehicle
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produced
gases.

In my opinion, I assert that our
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environment
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problem
has
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many


other causes
as well
.
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the
most poisonous gases which are
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produced
by
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Industries
are
also
harming
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environment
. To illustrate, the steel
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industries
are

burning coils to
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make
them in desirable shapes they release
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extrinsive
smoke while they heat it.

To exemplify, The
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Environment
act of 2020
clearly
depicts that the 58% of gases
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produced
by steel factories are

effectively
causing the
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environment
deeply
.

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To
Encapsulate, it can
be concluded
that the Environmental
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problems
of recent times has the
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Loss
of particular species of plant &
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animals
is
also
a
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get
cause
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but
not most
effectively
whereas they are
still
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many
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problems
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which which
are most harmful for
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environment
can be yes at the times, based on my knowledge yes it is having
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a lot of
other aspects which are
still
bothering the
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environment
by polluting the
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air
.
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IELTS essay Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

Essay
  American English
10 paragraphs
476 words
5.5
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