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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Adb3
Many people are in the assumption that, an extinction of a particular species of plants and animals can be a factor to be considered whereas, there are other pressing concerns for environmental problems. Throughout the essay, I will discuss my views on this topic. Firstly, I will discuss how loss of a particular species can lead to environmental problems. Secondly, I will discuss the bigger concerns for environmental problems. Life on Earth is dependent on each other and we humans are all part of the lifecycle. By stating the obvious, one must understand that extinction of a particular species can be a determining factor that can impact the environment. Indeed, we humans are the dominant rays on earth, but we do dependent on other species as a part of the lifecycle. For example, birds which are in the verge of extinction due to the raise of modern technologies that produces radiation. If birds are extinct, the reproduction of that species are lost. This will hinder the lifecycle which in-turn lead to environmental problems. On the other hand, there are other major factors that causes environmental problems. Among which is the Global warming, the revolution of industries in the early days are one of the reasons for Global warming. With increasing deforestation and contaminated waste from industries have inflicted damage to the environment. Apart from Global warming, there are other various factors that has led to environmental depletion. To summarize, every factor involved needs to be considered for environmental issues. The radius of damage might differ from one another. But measures must be taken to reduce further damage else the life of earth will be big question soon.
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are in the assumption that, an extinction of a particular species of plants and animals can be a
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to
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whereas, there are
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other
pressing concerns for
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environmental
problems. Throughout the essay, I will discuss my views on this topic.
Firstly
, I will discuss how loss of a particular species can lead to
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environmental
problems.
Secondly
, I will discuss the bigger concerns for
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environmental
problems.

Life on Earth is dependent on each
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other and
we humans are all part of the lifecycle. By stating the obvious, one
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must
understand that extinction of a particular species can be a determining
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factor
that can impact the environment.
Indeed
, we humans are the dominant rays on earth,
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but
we do dependent on
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other
species as a part of the lifecycle.
For example
, birds which are in the verge of extinction due to the raise of modern technologies that produces radiation. If birds are extinct, the reproduction of that species
are lost
. This will hinder the lifecycle which in-turn lead to
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environmental
problems.

On the
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other
hand, there are
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other
major
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factors
that causes
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environmental
problems. Among which is the Global warming, the revolution of industries in the early days are one of the reasons for Global warming. With increasing deforestation and contaminated waste from industries have inflicted damage to the environment. Apart from Global warming, there are
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other
various
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factors
that has led to
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environmental
depletion.

To summarize
, every
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factor
involved needs to
be considered
for
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environmental
issues. The radius of damage might differ from one another.
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But
measures
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reduce
further
damage else the life of earth will be
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IELTS essay Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
277 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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