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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.8

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. v. 8
The best thing that we can give to our future generations is a clean and green earth. It is argued that predominant environmental issue that we are currently having is the endangerment of few plants and animal species. On the other hand, a few people say that there are other vital environmental constraints. In the below paragraphs, I will discuss both the views and give my opinion. Nowadays, we hear a lot of news about the loss of a few species of plants and animals. It is disheartening to know this because nature must always be balanced with various trees and other living creatures. In a recent report published in the world environmental journal, it is said the temperatures recorded in the past couple of years are at all-time high and if this continues, we are soon going to face severe global warming problems. This is major because of the destruction of trees and plants in recent times. Because of this, there are various animals impacted and were exterminated. This is not a great sign, especially for our future generations. On the other hand, what is more, concerning is the air and water pollution. For the first time in history, there is a huge demand for clean oxygen and water. Day by day, the usage of plastic is increasing and this causing some serious problems because of the worst nature of plastic as it does not decompose in each and there will be some poisonous gases released too when it is burnt. For example, because of the air pollution in New Delhi, the capital city of India, people suffered a lot with health issues and few children died in recent times. Also, four of the top ten world's most polluted cities are in our nation. To conclude, any of the problems which lead to a bad environment are equally important and must be resolved soon as it is the need of the hour
The best thing that we can give to our future generations is a clean and green earth. It
is argued
that predominant environmental issue that we are
currently
having is the endangerment of few plants and animal species. On the
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other
hand, a few
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people
say that there are
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other
vital environmental constraints. In the below paragraphs, I will discuss both the views and give my opinion.

Nowadays, we hear
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a lot of
news about the loss of a few species of plants and animals. It is disheartening to know this
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because
nature
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
always
be balanced
with various trees and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
living creatures. In a recent report published in the world environmental journal, it
is said
the temperatures recorded in the past couple of years are at all-time high and if this continues, we are
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soon
going to face severe global warming problems. This is major
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because
of the destruction of trees and plants in recent times.
Because of this
, there are various animals impacted and
were exterminated
. This is not a great
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sign
,
especially
for our future generations.

On the
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other
hand,
what is more
, concerning is the air and water pollution. For the
first
time in history, there is a huge demand for clean oxygen and water. Day by day, the usage of plastic is increasing and this causing
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some
serious problems
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because
of the worst nature of plastic as it does not decompose in each and there will be
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some
poisonous gases released too when it
is burnt
.
For example
,
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because
of the air pollution in New Delhi, the capital city of India,
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people
suffered a lot with health issues and few children
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died
in recent times.
Also
, four of the top ten
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world's
most polluted cities are in our nation.

To conclude
, any of the problems which lead to a
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bad
environment are
equally
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important
and
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must
be resolved
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soon
as it is the need of the hour
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. v. 8

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
322 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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