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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals.Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. 566ye
Environmental problems are one of the major concerns all around the worlds. While many people think disappearing of many varieties of organisms and vegetation are the main concern, there are others who caters the view that there are much more significant adversaries than extinction of life forms. This essay will discuss both views in depth and explicate my inclination towards the latter. There is no denying in the fact that extinction of different species of animals and plants will cause harm to the environment. Because every species and plants have to play a vital role in the conservation of ecosystem. For example, plants which are grown under the ocean plays a key role in the survival of aquatic animals living there. A slight imbalance in the number will cause major impact on the lives a fisherman who relays on the number of fishes they catches, to survive. Even though there are significant effort on the extinctions of plants and animal species, there are multiple problems that are much detrimental to the environment. Pollution is increasing day by day and getting out of control for the government. Extensive farming is also causing lot of problems to the natural habitat of forests. For example, due to the water pollution, there is scarcity of drinking water in countries of Africa, where they have to walk kilo-meters to get clean water. Even though extensive farming is required to get enough food, it also accounts to deforestation which leads to climate change. The numbers of environmental problems are increasing day by day. Although extinction of a particular species or plant is a major problem for environment, there are also other factors such as, pollution and extensive farming which causes much more detrimental effects on our environment.
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the view that there are much more significant adversaries than
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of life forms. This essay will discuss both views in depth and explicate my inclination towards the latter.

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extinction
of
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different
species of animals and
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plants
will cause harm to the
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environment
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every species and
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plants
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have to
play a vital role in the conservation of ecosystem.
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,
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plants
which
are grown
under the ocean plays a key role in the survival of aquatic animals living there. A slight imbalance in the number will cause major impact on the
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a fisherman who relays on the number of fishes they
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catches
, to survive.

Even though
there are significant effort on the
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extinctions
of
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plants
and animal species, there are multiple
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problems
that are much detrimental to the
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environment
. Pollution is increasing day by day and getting out of control for the
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government
. Extensive farming is
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causing
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lot of
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to the natural habitat of forests.
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, due to the water pollution, there is scarcity of drinking water in countries of Africa, where they
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have to
walk kilo-meters to
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get
clean water.
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extensive farming
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get
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enough
food, it
also
accounts to deforestation which leads to climate
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change
.

The numbers of environmental
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problems
are increasing day by day. Although
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extinction
of a particular species or
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plant
is a major
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problem
for
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environment
, there are
also
other factors such as, pollution and extensive farming which causes much more detrimental effects on our
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environment
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IELTS essay Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

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