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Some people say that the experiences a child has before starting school have the most influence on their future life. Others say that experiences as a teenager, especially at school, are more influential. Discuss both views and give your own opinion?

Some people say that the experiences a child has before starting school have the most influence on their future life. Others say that experiences as a teenager, especially at school, are more influential. L7yp
While some people believe that what a child experiences prior to their school time is the most influential to the future life, others think that teenage experiences at school are more important. This essay will discuss both viewpoints. On the one hand, what pre-schoolers go through plays a crucial role in their adult life. Firstly, such experiences can contribute to a child's creativity. In fact, it seems effortless for children to absorb new things in life due to their brain's flexible plasticity. In addition, their developing brain can allow them to read those things in different ways, which can shape their own world view that can make them more creative. Furthermore, negatives that children are subjected to seem to take a heavy toll on their future life. Children who are victimized by bullying or abuse are more prone to become withdrawn and sensitive to society in adulthood. Thus, childhood experiences can cause a significant influence on a person's future life. On the other hand, teenage students' life experiences should not be regarded as trivial. Young people tend to change their behaviour and mindset as teenagers. When young people reach their puberty, they are likely to suffer social stress and aggression owing to their stress hormone system development. In the long run, such changes in their hormones may give rise to chronic mental problems later in life. Moreover, school time is instrumental in making a young person a well-rounded adult. Education at school can not only equip students with the fundamental knowledge needed for their prospective career but also facilitate their social awareness, such as moral code. Therefore, puberty-driven changes in teenagers' personality and schooling can affect their life as an adult. In conclusion, experiences as a pre-schooler can have an effect on their adult life. However, I believe that school time that teenagers have can equally influence adulthood. More importantly, both children and teenagers should be cared and educated appropriately.
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believe that what a child
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prior to their
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school
time is the most influential to the future
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life
, others
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think
that teenage
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are more
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. This essay will discuss both viewpoints.

On the one hand, what
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pre-schoolers
go through plays a crucial role in their adult
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life
.
Firstly
, such
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experiences
can contribute to a child's creativity. In fact, it seems effortless for
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children
to absorb new things in
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life
due to their brain's flexible plasticity.
In addition
, their developing brain can
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allow
them to read those things in
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different
ways, which can shape their
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own
world view that can
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make
them more creative.
Furthermore
, negatives that
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children
are subjected
to seem to take a heavy toll on their future
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life
.
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Children
who
are victimized
by bullying or abuse are more prone to become withdrawn and sensitive to society in adulthood.
Thus
, childhood
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experiences
can cause a significant influence on a person's future life.

On the other hand
, teenage students'
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life
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experiences
should not
be regarded
as trivial. Young
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people
tend to
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change
their
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behaviour
and mindset as
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teenagers
. When young
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people
reach their puberty, they are likely to suffer social
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stress
and aggression owing to their
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stress
hormone system development. In the long run, such
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changes
in their hormones may give rise to chronic mental problems later in
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life
.
Moreover
,
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school
time is instrumental in making a young person a well-rounded adult. Education at
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school
can not
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only
equip students with the fundamental knowledge needed for their prospective career
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but
also
facilitate their social awareness, such as moral code.
Therefore
, puberty-driven
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changes
in
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teenagers
' personality and schooling can affect their
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life
as an adult.

In conclusion
,
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experiences
as a
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pre-schooler
can have an effect on their adult
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life
.
However
, I believe that
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school
time that
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teenagers
have can
equally
influence adulthood. More
importantly
, both
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children
and
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teenagers
should
be cared
and educated
appropriately
.

IELTS essay Some people say that the experiences a child has before starting school have the most influence on their future life. Others say that experiences as a teenager, especially at school, are more influential.

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