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Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both these views.

Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. YDVn
People's Health is decreased day by day In this time of ultra-modern lifestyle. The section of society are opine that development of sports campus is the prime solution to improve health, while others believe this is not the only way. This will affect on few people rather than whole society, goverment should do some more action on that. Both the view discussed in this essay. General public use their leiser time effectively by spending on sport activity, when sports infrastucture are available at every where and easily accesible for everyone. For instance, every citizen could use cricket and football ground or gym in their free time for excercise or playing sports on everyday. In addition, Sports keep healthy and active to person. Any kind of sports has involved heavy excercise, by this anyone stay healthy by doing their favourite activity rather than heavy extra excercise. Basically, Sports building indeed helpfull to use further time on playing sports which will help to be fit and energetic. Conversely, Sports stadium and ground only usefull for several people who are already active and aware about it. Center should provide exercise equipment to every public garden. This kind of facility usefull for children and adults both. For example, Pubic garden which have sevral besic exercise instrument which will be use by evry child and senior citizen who are comming for refereshment. Moreover, authority should make restriction over unhealthy foods. There should strict law for high fate contained Junk and packaged food. Therefor, Extra fitness sources at emagement parks and strict ristriction over unhealthy food would enormous impect on the mass. In conclusion, Play ground and stadium definetly helpful to spent quality time with use of it and to stay fit and anthusiastic. However, other action such as ready available equiped public spot and law enforsment on non-healthy items would usefull for any layman.
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People
's Health
is decreased
day by day In this
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time
of ultra-modern lifestyle. The section of society are
Consider using a past participle here: "opined".
opine
that development of
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sports
campus is the prime solution to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
health, while others believe this is not the
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only
way. This will
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affect
on few
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people
rather
than whole society,
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goverment
should do
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some
more action on that. Both the view discussed in this essay.

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General public
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use
their
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leiser
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time
effectively
by spending on
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sport
activity, when
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sports
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infrastucture
are available at
Did you mean "everywhere"?
every where
and
easily
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accesible
for everyone.
For instance
, every citizen could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
cricket and football ground or gym in their free
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time
for
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excercise
or playing
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sports
on
'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean "every day"?
everyday
.
In addition
,
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Sports
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keep
healthy and active to person. Any kind of
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sports
has involved heavy
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excercise
, by this anyone
The pronoun 'anyone' is usually used with a third-person or a past tense verb: "stays", "staid", "stayed".
stay
healthy by doing their
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favourite
activity
rather
than heavy extra
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excercise
.
Basically
,
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Sports
building
indeed
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helpfull
to
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use
further
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time
on playing
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sports
which will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
to
be fit
and energetic.

Conversely
,
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Sports
stadium and ground
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only
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usefull
for several
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people
who are already active and aware about it. Center should provide exercise equipment to every public garden. This kind of facility
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usefull
for children and adults both.
For example
,
Did you mean "public"?
Pubic
garden which have
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sevral
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besic
exercise instrument which will be
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use
by
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evry
child and senior citizen who are
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comming
for
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refereshment
.
Moreover
, authority should
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make
restriction over unhealthy foods. There
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should strict
law for high fate contained Junk and packaged food. Therefor, Extra fitness sources at
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emagement
parks and strict
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ristriction
over unhealthy food would enormous
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impect
on the mass.

In conclusion
, Play ground and stadium
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definetly
helpful to spent quality
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time
with
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use
of it and to stay fit and
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anthusiastic
.
However
, other action such as ready available
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equiped
public spot and law
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enforsment
on non-healthy items would
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usefull
for any layman.

IELTS essay Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required.

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