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Extreme sports such as sky diving and skiing are very dangerous and should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

Extreme sports such as sky diving and skiing are very dangerous and should be banned. with this view? Ddep
In recent years, extreme sports activities have become increasingly popular. However some people argue that these activities are too dangerous and should be prohibited owing to its involments of risk while critics have disagreement over the above mentioned notion. i am definitely with the critics and believe that these activities should not be banned. this essay will highlight both the sides with suitable illustrations. In the one hand, there are two crucial reasons interpreting why extreme sports should be approved. First, original purpose of these sports activities help participants to train survival skill. For example, extreme sports activities such as Bunji Jump and Sky diving helps to pialot to survival during failure of plane. this sports can be proven as life saving for people. Second, these activities provide knowledge and aware people to safety equipments. performing such activities it is mandatory to wear helmet, gloves and life saving jacket witch provide ample knowledge how to use equipment. third, allowing such activities in tourists places acctact people towards which can increase good amout of income. This accumulated income can be help to improve economic growth of any nation. On the other hand, some sports activities are more harmful and performing them without safety measures can be dangerous for human life. To begin with, often failure of safety equipments people can suffer serious injuries. During failure of time they do not have other safety back-up plan. This can lead them to serious detriments. For instance, fomous Australian cricketer Philips Hues deth while playing bouncer ball even he wear a helmet but ball passed through the front side of helmet's iron grid. In conclusion, discussing both side of view i pen down to saying that extreme sports activities should not be banned because such activities provide knowledge about how to use safety equipments and survival skills. Also, gathered income can develop the nations at good extent.
In recent years,
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have become
increasingly
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However
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some
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people
argue that these
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activities
are too
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dangerous
and should
be prohibited
owing to its
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involments
of
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risk
while critics have disagreement over the above mentioned notion.
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i
am definitely with the critics and believe that these
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activities
should not
be banned
.
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this
essay will highlight both the sides with suitable illustrations. In the one hand, there are two crucial reasons interpreting why
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extreme
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sports
should
be approved
.
First
, original purpose of these
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sports
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activities
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help
participants to train survival
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skill
.
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,
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extreme
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sports
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activities
such as
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Bunji
Jump and
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Sky diving
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helps
to
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pialot
to survival during failure of
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plane
.
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this
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sports
can
be proven
as life saving for
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people
. Second, these
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activities
provide knowledge and aware
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people
to
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safety
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equipments
.
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performing
such
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activities
it is mandatory to wear helmet, gloves and life saving jacket witch provide ample knowledge how to
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use
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equipment
.
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third
, allowing such
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activities
in tourists places
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acctact
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people
towards which can increase
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good
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amout
of income. This accumulated income can be
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help
to
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improve
economic growth of any nation.
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,
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some
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sports
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activities
are more harmful and performing them without
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safety
measures can be
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dangerous
for human life. To
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begin
with,
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often
failure of
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safety
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equipments
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people
can suffer serious injuries. During failure of time they do not have other
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safety
back-up plan. This can lead them to serious detriments.
For instance
,
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fomous
Australian cricketer Philips Hues
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deth
while playing bouncer ball even he
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wear
a helmet
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but
ball passed through the front side of helmet's iron grid.

In conclusion
, discussing both side of view
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i
pen down to saying that
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extreme
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sports
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activities
should not
be banned
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because
such
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activities
provide knowledge about how to
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use
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safety
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equipments
and survival
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skills
.
Also
, gathered income can develop the nations at
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good
extent.
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IELTS essay Extreme sports such as sky diving and skiing are very dangerous and should be banned. with this view?

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  American English
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