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Some people say that schools should teach good behaviour to children and introduce good behaviour to children and introduce them to right or wrong.Do you agree with the statement?

Some people say that schools should teach good behaviour to children and introduce good behaviour to children and introduce them to right or wrong. pJGW3
It is often argued that school should take equal responsibility as parents in imparting moral values and good habits in the children. This essay agrees with the statement that it is the primary duty of the teachers to teach good principles to the children. It is undoubtedly true that the school is considered to be the second home for children as they spend a great amount of time in schools along with their peers and children. Therefore, the teachers should take the initiative of teaching them social values. For example, these days school organise variety of activities to increase the team work and cooperation among children. Hence, it becomes the utmost duty of the teachers to inculcate good values and to make them aware about what is right or wrong. Apart from that, parents are also responsible to convey moral sense to their parts. However, due to the job stress they barely get any time to monitor each and every activity of their little ones. Thus, when the children are at school, the teachers are the primary guardians and it is their duty to upbring morality in their students. Moreover the atmosphere of the home also affects the child behaviour. For instance, children observe certain actions of their family members like talking out loud, arguing and a lot more. Hence, behavioral studies should be taken by teachers. Taking everything into consideration, it can be asserted that it is the sole commitment of the school to guide the children in a righteous way because they spend a good amount of time under the supervision of the teachers.
It is
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argued that
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school
should take equal responsibility as parents in imparting moral values and
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good
habits in the
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children
. This essay
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agrees
with the statement that it is the primary duty of the
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teachers
to teach
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good
principles to the
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children
. It is
undoubtedly
true that the
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school
is considered
to be the second home for
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children
as they spend a great amount of time in
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schools
along with their peers and
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children
.
Therefore
, the
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teachers
should take the initiative of teaching them social values.
For example
, these days
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school
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organise
variety of activities to increase the team work and cooperation among
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children
.
Hence
, it becomes the utmost duty of the
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teachers
to inculcate
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good
values and to
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make
them aware about what is right or
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wrong
. Apart from that, parents are
also
responsible to convey moral sense to their parts.
However
, due to the job
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stress
they
barely
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get
any time to monitor each and every activity of their
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little
ones.
Thus
, when the
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children
are at
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school
, the
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teachers
are the primary guardians and it is their duty to
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upbring
morality in their students.
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Moreover
the atmosphere of the home
also
affects the child
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behaviour
.
For instance
,
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children
observe certain actions of their family members like talking out loud, arguing and a lot more.
Hence
, behavioral studies should
be taken
by
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teachers
. Taking everything into consideration, it can
be asserted
that it is the sole commitment of the
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school
to guide the
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children
Consider replacing "in a righteous way" with the adverb for "righteous"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in a righteous way
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because
they spend a
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good
amount of time under the supervision of the
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teachers
.

IELTS essay Some people say that schools should teach good behaviour to children and introduce good behaviour to children and introduce them to right or wrong.

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
266 words
5.0
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