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Some people say that school studies are not useful and most important things are learnt outside the school. Do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion and examples.

Some people say that school studies are not useful and most important things are learnt outside the school. Give your opinion and examples. 6N0B3
No one can deny how much education is necessary for human life. Over the centuries education system has changed, nowadays we have schools as base of education. Some people still believe going to school is wasting time and being at society is very useful. I believe going to school still is the best choice for all individual. In my opinion, it is true everybody can learn from outside and knowledge that gain from out of school is not comparable with education is gained from school. Although, this kind of knowledge is not very useful for children, in fact it has some dark side. For example, imagine a young boy that hangout with adults, unfortunately, this boy might learnt some bad thing like tell a lie or smoking or using drug or broken law. On the other hand, I believe that school can generally provide better education for children. First of all, school is a place that everybody has a same opportunity to gain information and going to higher levels. For instance, poor children in far away village study the same book as rich children in the big city. Secondly, schools have curriculum and regular tests insurance that students learn their courses and all skill that they will need in the future. In each year of school, students learn different skills and courses that are designed for their age. In school, students learn how to cooperate with each other to complete their homework, so this skill prepares them for their future working life. Moreover, students in the school have this chance to discover their abilities, like writing, painting, teaching, swimming and so on. All these skills will help students to build their own personalities. In sum up, schools are first society that everybody is experience. This society is designed with benefit rules and base on necessary skill and knowledge that everybody needs.
No one can deny how much
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education
is necessary for human life. Over the
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centuries
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education
system has
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changed
, nowadays we have
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schools
as base of
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education
.
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Some
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people
still
believe going to
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school
is wasting time and being at society is
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very
useful. I believe going to
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school
still
is the best choice for all individual.

In my opinion, it is true everybody can
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learn
from outside and knowledge that gain from out of
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school
is not comparable with
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education
is gained
from
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school
. Although, this kind of knowledge is not
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very
useful for
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children
, in fact it has
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some
dark side.
For example
, imagine a young boy that hangout with adults, unfortunately, this boy might
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learnt
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some
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bad
thing like
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tell
a lie or smoking or using drug or broken law.

On the other hand
, I believe that
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school
can
generally
provide better
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education
for
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children
.
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First of all
,
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school
is a place that everybody has a same opportunity to gain information and going to higher levels.
For instance
, poor
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children
in far away village study the same book as rich
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children
in the
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big
city.
Secondly
,
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schools
have curriculum and regular
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tests
insurance that
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students
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learn
their courses and all
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skill
that they will need in the future.

In each year of
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school
,
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students
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learn
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different
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skills
and courses that
are designed
for their age. In
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school
,
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students
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learn
how to cooperate with each other to complete their homework,
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so
this
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skill
prepares them for their future working life.
Moreover
,
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students
in the
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school
have this chance to discover their abilities, like writing, painting, teaching, swimming and
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so
on. All these
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skills
will
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help
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students
to build their
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own
personalities.

In sum up,
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schools
are
first
society that everybody is experience. This society
is designed
with benefit
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rules
and base on necessary
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skill
and knowledge that everybody needs.
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IELTS essay Some people say that school studies are not useful and most important things are learnt outside the school. Give your opinion and examples.

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  American English
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6.0
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