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Some people say that relationships should be based on honesty and trust. Others believe that it is sometimes necessary to be dishonest in order to maintain harmony. Which approach do you consider to be better in relationships and why? v.1

Some people say that relationships should be based on honesty and trust. Others believe that it is sometimes necessary to be dishonest in order to maintain harmony. Which approach do you consider to be better in relationships and why? v. 1
The type of relationships we have with a partner, brothers, sisters, colleagues and neighbours are all different. It is argued by some people that connections should be established on honesty and trust, whereas, others believe that it is occasionally important to be dishonest in order to sustain balance. In my opinion, sincerity and faith are the important pillars on which any relation has built upon because these are everlasting and without these, it can only be built on mistrust and suspicion. Trust develops gradually in a relationship. Firstly, it is important for the two to have faith in each other for the connection to succeed. For example, if a person lies to someone, other feels good for some time, but eventually realizes they have been deceived and as a result, they will be less likely to believe the same person in the future. In addition, a bond based on confidence and belief is less likely to be affected by others interference. On the other hand, being honest does not mean you have to tell everything to your partner. To illustrate, it is sometimes better to stay quiet and don’t argue or say anything, instead of saying the wrong things to maintain a healthy link. Many individuals believe that it is occasionally important to be dishonest in order to maintain harmony. Although, it may comfort the other person for a while and save your relationship, but, eventually, they will find out and it will have even serious consequences. In conclusion, some people argue that bondage between two individuals should be built upon honesty and trust while others consider being dishonest sometimes is important to maintain consonance. In my opinion, sincerity and faith are the basic elements of any relation because these are for life while dishonesty is a short-term solution that will eventually destroy any type of relationship.
The type of
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relationships
we have with a partner, brothers, sisters, colleagues and
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are all
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. It
is argued
by
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some
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people
that connections should
be established
on honesty and trust, whereas, others believe that it is
occasionally
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important
to be dishonest in order to sustain balance. In my opinion, sincerity and faith are the
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important
pillars on which any relation has built upon
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because
these are everlasting and without these, it can
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only
be built
on mistrust and suspicion.

Trust develops
gradually
in a
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relationship
.
Firstly
, it is
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important
for the two to have faith in each
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other
for the connection to succeed.
For example
, if a person lies to someone,
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other
feels
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good
for
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some
time,
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but
eventually
realizes they have
been deceived
and
as a result
, they will be less likely to believe the same person in the future.
In addition
, a bond based on confidence and belief is less likely to be
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affected
by
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interference.

On the
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other
hand, being honest does not mean you
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have to
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tell
everything to your partner. To illustrate, it is
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sometimes
better to stay quiet and don’t argue or say anything,
instead
of saying the
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wrong
things to maintain a healthy link.
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Many
individuals believe that it is
occasionally
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important
to be dishonest in order to maintain harmony. Although, it may comfort the
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other
person for a while and save your
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relationship
,
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but
,
eventually
, they will find out and it will have even serious consequences.

In conclusion
,
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some
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people
argue that bondage between two individuals should
be built
upon honesty and trust while others consider being dishonest
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sometimes
is
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important
to maintain consonance. In my opinion, sincerity and faith are the basic elements of any relation
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because
these are for life while dishonesty is a short-term solution that will
eventually
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destroy
any type of
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relationship
.
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IELTS essay Some people say that relationships should be based on honesty and trust. Others believe that it is sometimes necessary to be dishonest in order to maintain harmony. Which approach do you consider to be better in relationships and why? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
307 words
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