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Some people think it’s the government’s responsibility to tackle environmental issues. Others believe it is up to each individual to be environmentally responsible. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people say that protecting the environment is the government’s responsibility. Others believe that every individual should be responsible for it. v. 18
Most people argue that the environmental issues only belong to the obligation of the government while other individuals deem that global problems pertain to each person that inhabits it. Therefore, this essay tries to cover both of the mentioned views and argue in favour of the latter. On the one hand, the population of all countries owns their jobs which require a long time concentrating and energy. In other words, they tend to think that it is the state’s duty to address global problems whereas as many believe, these concerns are not included in their responsibilities. Furthermore, a majority of people has got used to the fact that all appearing issues of their home country are tackled by the government. In fact, the number of those who are reluctant to defend ecology is increasing and an array of them are more obvious to blame the government in environmental deterioration for oil and gas businesses. On the other hand, some people worry about the mentioned trend as the environmental condition of the Earth has to be enhanced by each person. Those who support this idea strongly believe that individual roles in the protection of the environment are essential so people should incorporate and take the situation under their control. Likewise, there are no points in government’s actions for improving the ecosystem without any efforts of people who continually contaminate the environment in every-day life. As a result, the ecological condition would worsen and there would be no significant and respectable place to live at all. In conclusion, I consider that this occasion is such a sophisticated issue and both views of points are expressing the margin between the government and the nation about the environment. In this case, the only realistic solution is association of all humans to protect the Earth. By putting this way, the whole population has to accept compulsory responsibilities and volunteer for ecology.
Most
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people
argue that the environmental issues
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only
belong to the obligation of the
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government
while other individuals deem that global problems pertain to each person that inhabits it.
Therefore
, this essay tries to cover both of the mentioned views and argue in
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favour
of the latter.

On the one hand, the population of all countries
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owns
their jobs which require a long time concentrating and energy.
In other words
, they tend to
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think
that it is the state’s duty to address global problems whereas as
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many
believe, these concerns are not included in their responsibilities.
Furthermore
, a majority of
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people
has
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got
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used
to the fact that all appearing issues of their home country
are tackled
by the
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government
. In fact, the number of those who are reluctant to defend ecology is increasing and an array of them are more obvious to blame the
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government
in environmental deterioration for oil and gas businesses.

On the other hand
,
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some
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people
worry about the mentioned trend as the environmental condition of the Earth
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has to
be enhanced
by each person. Those who support this
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idea
strongly
believe that individual roles in the protection of the environment are essential
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so
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people
should incorporate and take the situation under their control.
Likewise
, there are no points in
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government’s
actions for improving the ecosystem without any efforts of
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people
who
continually
contaminate the environment in every-day life.
As a result
, the ecological condition would worsen and there would be no significant and respectable place to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
at all.

In conclusion
, I consider that this occasion is such a sophisticated issue and both views of points are expressing the margin between the
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government
and the nation about the environment.
In this case
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
realistic solution is association of all humans to protect the Earth. By putting this way, the whole population
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
has to
accept compulsory responsibilities and volunteer for ecology.
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IELTS essay Some people think it’s the government’s responsibility to tackle environmental issues. Others believe it is up to each individual to be environmentally responsible.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
316 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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