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Some people say that parents should organise free time activity. Others to say children should be free time to choose what they do in there free time discuss both side and opine

Some people say that parents should organise free time activity. Others to say children should be free time to choose what they do in there free time discuss both side and opine BaXW5

My opinion tends towards those who claim that care-taker must take decisions regarding leisure time activity however some to say youngones need to select free time by own as per rest. The Prominent justification to support my view point is that it is it is a best way to choose free time activities by birth-givers. In other words, through this method children maybe learn knowledge about everything because the parents know that which way good or bad just because of a they have great experience. In this way, youngminds can able to learn extra skills under the supervisions. For example, a recent survey was conducted by Department of Education vielnom, who found if 85% children's select spare time activity with assistance of guardians then they can enhance information as well as get good marks in their study. Consequently, by parents youngones need to choose their free time it plays a vital role in themselves. However, teenager ought to organise their leisure time. To elaborate it, children can ameliorate their personality traits then they would not only enjoy themselves but also stress free from their study work it is a very effective for youngones. In this way a teenager will be become a sharpminded It is seen that sometimes youngones have a keen interest in a few activities such as games and song if they try those activities pre-teens can show their hidden Talent in the front of others. For instance, California University shown that when children select those things which they have their interest then pre-teens become a more creative rather than others. Thus, it is much beneficial if teenagers choose spare time by themselves. To conclude, my opinion children need to take decisions about their life or leisure time they can increase enthusiasm, youngminds should not fully depand on their parents. But simultaneously caretakers must have watchful eyes on all activities of their pre-teens.

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must
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activity
however
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some
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youngones
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own
 as per rest.

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free
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activities
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children
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because
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good
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bad
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just
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because
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a they
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youngminds
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can able to
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skills
 under the supervisions. For example
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vielnom
, who found if 85% children's select spare You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpointgenerationpastsecondturnspace
time
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activity
 with assistance of guardians then they can enhance information as well
 as This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
get
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :beneficialproduct
good
 marks in their study. Consequently
, by parents Possible spelling mistake found.young ones
youngones
 need to choose their You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcomplimentary
free
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time
 it plays a vital role in themselves.

However
, This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :juvenileadolescent
teenager
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organise
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time
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children
 can ameliorate their personality traits then they would not This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
only
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but
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :accentuate
stress
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free
 from their study work it is a This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:extremelyimmenselysupremelysuperb
very
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youngones
. In this way a This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :juvenileadolescent
teenager
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 a Possible spelling mistake found.sharp minded
sharpminded
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seen
 that This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :in some instances
sometimes
Possible spelling mistake found.young ones
youngones
 have a keen interest in a few You use this word too often, consider replacing it withactionlifeenterpriseexercisemovement
activities
 such as games and song if they try those You use this word too often, consider replacing it withactionlifeenterpriseexercisemovement
activities
Possible spelling mistake found.preteens
pre-teens
 can This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :demonstrateportrayindicatedisplay
show
 their hidden Talent in the front of others. For instance
, California University shown that when You use this word too often, consider replacing it withinfanttoddleradolescentjuvenileyouthteenager
children
 select those things which they have their interest then Possible spelling mistake found.preteens
pre-teens
 become a more creative rather
 than others. Thus
, it is much beneficial if This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :juvenilesadolescents
teenagers
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time
 by themselves.

To conclude
, my opinion You use this word too often, consider replacing it withinfanttoddleradolescentjuvenileyouthteenager
children
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time
 they can increase enthusiasm, Possible spelling mistake found.young minds
youngminds
 should not fully
Possible spelling mistake found.demanddepend
depand
 on their parents. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
But
simultaneously
 caretakers This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :require
must
 have watchful eyes on all You use this word too often, consider replacing it withactionlifeenterpriseexercisemovement
activities
 of their Possible spelling mistake found.preteens
pre-teens
. 