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Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed films need to be seen in a cinema v.16

Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed films need to be seen in a cinema v. 16
Nowadays it is argued that watching movies in a cinema is not demanded as people have some personal devices such as laptops to watch, while others think That watching in a cinema is more enjoyable, which is not comparable. I lean a little bit toward the second view. This essay will discuss that although there are many people who prefer to watch at home on their own devices seeing a film in a cinema is undeniable. Today, the number of devices that technology provides for us is increasing and the majority of people have many of them like smartphones, tablets CD players and So forth. Besides, people have busy schedules these days and there is no enough time to go out. So, in regard to these circumstances and these home facilities, many people tend to just buy a film and see it, which is more convenient for them. From another perspective, cinema plays an important role in entertaining people. There is a great deal of evidence to support this. A recent survey by the US, reinforces the importance of being in a company and friendly atmosphere to release our negative emotions. It is also recommended to see movies in a cinema because of its indirect impact on social skills improvement. To conclude, despite the fact that seeing films at home seems more comfortable, especially in the lack of time, the advantages of going to the cinema should be considered. My own view is that each person should take circumstances into account and it is possible, it is better to spend leisure time in cinema rather than watching films on your own.
Nowadays it
is argued
that watching movies in a
cinema
is not demanded as
people
have
some
personal devices such as laptops to
watch
, while others
think


That watching in a
cinema
is more enjoyable, which is not comparable. I lean a
little bit
toward the second view. This essay will discuss that although there are
many
people
who prefer to
watch
at home on their
own
devices seeing a film in a
cinema
is undeniable.

Today
, the number of devices that technology provides for us is increasing and the majority of
people
have
many
of them like smartphones, tablets CD players and
So
forth.
Besides
,
people
have busy schedules these days and there is no
enough
time to go out.
So
, in regard to these circumstances and these home facilities,
many
people
tend to
just
buy
a film and
see
it, which is more convenient for them.

From another perspective,
cinema
plays an
important
role in entertaining
people
. There is a great deal of evidence to support this. A recent survey by the US, reinforces the importance of being in a
company
and friendly atmosphere to release our
negative
emotions. It is
also
recommended to
see
movies in a
cinema
because
of its indirect impact on social
skills
improvement.

To conclude
, despite the fact that seeing films at home seems more comfortable,
especially
in the lack of time, the advantages of going to the
cinema
should
be considered
. My
own
view is that each person should take circumstances into account and it is possible, it is better to spend leisure time in
cinema
rather
than watching films on your
own
.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed films need to be seen in a cinema v. 16

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
271 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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