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Some people say that it is necessary to use animals for testing medicines intended for human use. Others, however, think it is cruel and unnecessary. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.1

Some people say that it is necessary to use animals for testing medicines intended for human use. Others, however, think it is cruel and unnecessary. v. 1
It is believed that medicines are always tested in the animal before giving to the people use. While I have tended to the point that testing on the animals is morally wrong. This essay will discuss both sides of this issue, and then I will give my own opinions on the matter. On the one hand, animal testing argue that the benefits for humanity are large enough to cause harm to few animals. The only alternative for animal experiment is mostly a human experiment that would be avoided as much as possible. Moreover, animal testing is a necessary important stage before testing on human. Beside, animal experiments can also perform on some creatures such as flies or worms because these animals would feel less pain than a monkey and lab mice. For example, animal testing has so far saved many patients with the virus diseases by finding suitable vaccines. On the other hand, animals should receive the respectful as the human does, and it is really morally wrong to animals when they are tools to test for the medicine. Moreover, testing on animals is one of the most reliable ways to save the humanity. For instance, every year there is a significant number animals are used in the experiment purpose and almost need to tackle with the extreme pain about physical and mental health. To sum up, although testing on animal may be morally wrong and cost a significant amount of money, it still needs due to its unique benefits.
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testing
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animals
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morally
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wrong
. This essay will discuss both sides of this issue, and then I will give my
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own
opinions on the matter.

On the one hand,
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animal
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testing
argue that the benefits for humanity are large
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enough
to cause harm
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animals
. The
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alternative for
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as much as possible.
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testing
is a necessary
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before
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on human. Beside,
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animal
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creatures such as flies or worms
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would feel less pain than a monkey and lab mice.
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animal
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far saved
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patients with the virus diseases by finding suitable vaccines.

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,
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animals
should receive the respectful as the human does, and it is
really
morally
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to
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animals
when they are tools to
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test
for the medicine.
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,
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testing
on
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animals
is one of the most reliable ways to save the humanity.
For instance
, every year there is a significant number
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animals
are
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used
in the
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experiment
purpose and almost need to tackle with the extreme pain about physical and mental health.

To sum up, although
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testing
on
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may be
morally
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wrong
and cost a significant amount of money, it
still
needs due to its unique benefits.
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IELTS essay Some people say that it is necessary to use animals for testing medicines intended for human use. Others, however, think it is cruel and unnecessary. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
250 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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Lexical Resource: 8.0
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