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Some people say that it is better to involve students on how to run their school. Do you agree and disagree

Some people say that it is better to involve students on how to run their school. Do you agree and disagree Jxme
Schooling is the meant for the children to study and make their future bright. Some individuals say that it is better students on how to run their school. I agree with the given statemen. I will discuss some points in the upcoming paragraphs. to begin with, school is the place where children can learn rule and regulations how to communicate with others ans also they become decision making. Apart from that, pupils have sharp minded. They have full of imagination and new hidden talent which helps to boost their confidence and accomplish their goal. For example, due to advancement of technology children becom more independen. They can use internet and gather more information related to study which enhanc their knowledge and get more grades in study. Which is represen the school who are achieve top rank in the punjab. Moreove, learner work practical rather than thoratical they are participate in extra-curriculum activity who are selected for particular games which children make more interest it good impact on childre so that children can feel energetic as well as keep fit healthy. However, some of the demerits if parents put more pressure on their children to get more grades and standin first positio. Some children are not capable to acheive task because every children have on mind and creativity some pupils are not perfect in study but they are well in extra activity. Children are sensitiv. sometime, children indulge in pressure which is bad impact on students minds. To conclude, better step could be taken for theit future endeavour. Teachers and parents should be take care of children in the little things
Schooling is the meant for the
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children
to
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study
and
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make
their future bright.
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Some
individuals say that it is better students on how to run their school. I
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agree
with the
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given
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statemen
. I will discuss
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some
points in the upcoming paragraphs.

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to
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begin
with, school is the place where
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children
can learn
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rule
and regulations how to communicate with others ans
also
they become
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decision making
. Apart from that, pupils have sharp minded. They have full of imagination and new hidden talent which
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helps
to boost their confidence and accomplish their goal.
For example
, due to advancement of technology
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children
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becom
more
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independen
. They can
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use
internet and gather more information related to
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study
which
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enhanc
their knowledge and
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get
more grades in
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study
.
“Which” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Which
is
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represen
the school who are
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achieve
top rank in the
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punjab
.
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Moreove
, learner work practical
rather
than
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thoratical
they are
Consider using a past participle here: "participated".
participate
in extra-curriculum activity who
are selected
for particular games which
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children
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
more interest
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it
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good
impact on
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childre
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so
that
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children
can feel energetic
as well
as
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keep
fit healthy.

However
,
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some of the
demerits if parents put more pressure on their
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children
to
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get
more grades and
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standin
first
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positio
.
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Some
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children
are not capable to
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acheive
task
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because
every
The noun should be probably in the singular form: "child"?
children
have on mind and creativity
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some
pupils are not perfect in
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study
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but
they are well in extra activity.
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Children
are
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sensitiv
.
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sometime
,
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children
indulge in pressure which is
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bad
impact on students minds.

To conclude
, better step could
be taken
for
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theit
future
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endeavour
. Teachers and parents should be take care of
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children
in the
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little
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things
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IELTS essay Some people say that it is better to involve students on how to run their school. Do you agree and disagree

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
269 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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