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Some people say that industrial growth is necessary to solar poverty but others think it is great environment problem discuss both views with your opinion .

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In this contemporary era industrialisation is rising day by day it is believed by few folks growth of factory is essential to decrease the level of poverty but others think This growth is responsible for environmental problem therefore it should be banned Properly. I will discuss both views with my own opinion in upcoming paragraphs. To commence with the benefit of industrial growth to control the poverty of all nations. 1st of all, If factories are developed in all city then residents can get large number of job opportunities which not only help them to overcome from poverty but also they can be able to complete their basic needs and dreams as well. These growth help in countries economic and social development by increasing the productivity of all the material in world market. It increased import and export with other nations and make relations stronger between all countries. Consequently industrialisation help in medical field by making lot of medicines to overcome from Dangerous illness. Nevertheless although growth of Industry is benevolent for inhabitants but also it put bad impact on environment. Firstly, In factory high use of raw material for making various products which pollute not only here but pure water as well which cause of dangerous diseases. In industries big machines are sound loudly which cause of noise pollution. Due to the growth of industries pollution rise day by day because large number of factories are built in forest therefore plants or cut by human beings. As a result large use of chemical is responsible for global warming so industrys put bad impact on human beings and animals as well. To conclude environment issues are increased due to industrialisation government should ban those factory in which large amounts of chemicals are used to decrease the level of pollution and people should grow more and more trees For pure air and live longer.
In this contemporary era
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industrialisation
is rising day by day it
is believed
by few
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folks
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growth
of
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factory
is essential to decrease the level of poverty
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but
others
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think
This
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growth
is responsible for environmental problem
therefore
it should
be banned
Properly
. I will discuss both views with my
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own
opinion in upcoming paragraphs. To commence with the benefit of industrial
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growth
to control the poverty of all nations. 1st of all, If
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factories
are developed
in all city then residents can
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get
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large
number of job opportunities which not
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only
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help
them to overcome from poverty
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but
also
they can be able to complete their basic needs and dreams
as well
. These
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growth
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help
in countries economic and social development by increasing the productivity of all the material in world market. It increased import and export with other nations and
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make
relations stronger between all countries.
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Consequently
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industrialisation
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help
in medical field by making
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lot of
medicines to overcome from
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Dangerous
illness.
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Nevertheless
although
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growth
of
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Industry
is benevolent for inhabitants
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but
also
it put
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bad
impact on environment.
Firstly
, In
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factory
high
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use
of raw material for making various products which pollute not
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only
here
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but
pure water
as well
which cause of
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dangerous
diseases. In
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industries
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big
machines are sound
loudly
which cause of noise pollution. Due to the
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growth
of
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industries
pollution rise day by day
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because
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large
number of
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factories
are built
in forest
therefore
plants or
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cut
by human beings.
As a result
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large
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use
of chemical is responsible for global warming
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so
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industrys
put
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bad
impact on human beings and animals
as well
.
To conclude
environment issues
are increased
due to
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industrialisation
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government
should ban those
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factory
in which
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large
amounts of chemicals are
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used
to decrease the level of pollution and
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people
should grow more and more trees For pure air and
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live
longer.
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IELTS essay Some people say that industrial growth is necessary to solar poverty but others think it is great environment problem

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