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some people say that family is the most powerful influence in a child development.Other factors such as television,friend,music etc play a greater role today. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Family play a major role in everybody life. A number of people argue that family is the most powerful influence in a child development while other said other factors also play a essential role. This essay will explore argument for both sides of the debate and provide detailed analysis. To begin with, child mind is just like a clay with can be mold at any shape. At that time, family play a crucial role, parent teach their child to give a right direction.
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like a clay with can be mold at any shape. At that time, family play a crucial role, parent teach their child to give a right direction.

IELTS essay some people say that family is the most powerful influence in a child development. Other factors such as television, friend, music etc play a greater role today.

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  American English
1 paragraphs
83 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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