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My name is Safouane Haouzaoui, and I am 18 years old. I am from Morocco and I live with my family of 8. My father is a personal driver and my mother is a housewife. So I have 5 siblings. I am excessively pleased to write you this letter to apply for the SBW scholarship. My dream is to continue my university education and I will spare no effort to achieve it. I crystal clear that is my choosing to this field was not in vain because it is the result of a long passion. My interest in electronics, in general, began when I was 16 and I tried to replace my phone operating system version, so I searched through the internet and after a long journey, I succeeded. I did not stop here, I tried to change the windows on my computer and I succeeded in this attempt too. And that led me to be the supervisor of the computer department in my school library. My work ranged from computer maintenance and taking care of it. Then, in the third year of high school, I took an optional course, Computer Science 3, contains the basics of programming and computer science, and I was fascinated by this course and its content. Therefore, I joined the CS50x course from Harvard University and I learned a lot about the C programming language and Algorithms, although I did not finish the course. Addition to that, there are several reasons why I chose Turkey as a destination for my university education. First, I know about how much Turkey is developed in this field and it is really huge. For example satellites, self-driving e-bus, Teknopark near Istanbul and a lot of other achievements. Because such advanced technologies need a strong education system and plenty of information about programming and AI, so that makes me feel that is one of the best options to learn about software engineering and programming. Second universities types of equipment must be really good in such a developed country, and that's proving to me that the quality of education I would have is excellent. I also have a sub-point that is the Turkish culture are similar in many ways to our Arabian culture, this would help me to blend in the community and would be much easier to me to work in groups and make friends in my university. Lastly, the education that I would obtain will make my life better and provide me with a good job in many companies. Additionally, it will give me a tool to contribute to the development of my country, Morroco, especially if it a good quality education as I said previously. And it will give me something that I can share it with my community. This opportunity will make me able to help my family, country and community, and have a good job in many companies and will provide me with a good life. I crystal clear, keen, eager and determined to achieve my aims and if I won this scholarship, I will spare no effort to achieve my goals, help and inspire my colleagues and the community.
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Safouane
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Haouzaoui
, and I am 18 years
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. I am from Morocco and I
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live
with my family of 8. My father is a personal driver and my mother is a housewife.
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I have 5 siblings. I am
excessively
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pleased
to write you this letter to apply for the
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SBW
scholarship. My dream is to continue my
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university
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education
and I will spare no effort to achieve it.

I crystal
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clear
that is
my choosing to this field was not in vain
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because
it is the result of a long passion. My interest in electronics,
in general
, began when I was 16 and I tried to replace my phone operating system version,
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so
I searched through the internet and after a long journey, I succeeded. I did not
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stop
here, I tried to
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change
the windows on my computer and I succeeded in this attempt too. And that led me to be the supervisor of the computer department in my school library. My work ranged from computer maintenance and taking care of it.

Then, in the third year of high school, I took an optional course, Computer Science 3, contains the basics of programming and computer science, and I
was fascinated
by this course and its content.
Therefore
, I
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joined
the CS50x course from Harvard
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University
and I learned a lot about the C programming language and Algorithms, although I did not finish the course.

Addition to that, there are several reasons why I chose Turkey as a destination for my
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university
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education
.
First
, I know about how much Turkey
is developed
in this field and it is
really
huge.
For example
satellites, self-driving e-bus,
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Teknopark
near Istanbul and
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a lot of
other achievements.
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Because
such advanced technologies need a strong
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education
system and
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plenty
of information about programming and AI,
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so
that
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makes
me feel
that is
one of the best options to learn about software engineering and programming.

Second
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types of equipment
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be
really
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good
in such a
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developed country
, and that's proving to me that the quality of
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education
I would have is excellent. I
also
have a sub-point
that is
the Turkish culture are similar in
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many
ways to our Arabian culture, this would
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help
me to blend in the community and would be much easier to me to work in groups and
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make
friends in my university.

Lastly
, the
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education
that I would obtain will
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make
my life better and provide me with a
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good
job in
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many
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companies
.
Additionally
, it will give me a tool to contribute to the development of my country,
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Morroco
,
especially
if
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it
a
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good
quality
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education
as I said previously. And it will give me something that I can share it with my community.

This opportunity will
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make
me able to
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help
my family, country and community, and have a
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good
job in
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many
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companies
and will provide me with a
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good
life. I crystal
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clear
, keen, eager and determined to achieve my aims and if I won this scholarship, I will spare no effort to achieve my goals,
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help
and inspire my colleagues and the community.
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IELTS essay motivation letteer of your-self

Essay
  American English
7 paragraphs
524 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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