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International sports games

International Sports events gathered a lot of people especially the best sportifs and players of the world. These kinds of events is broadcasted all around the globe and everyone as their eyes on it. Who say International Sports Events automatically say host country. By the way, we can ask ourselves, if hosting an international sports event is a advantage or an inconvenient for the host country? In the first part we are going to talk about the better future that can bring an International Sports events for a Host country. Then, in the second part we will see how that can have important damage in the differents country's activities. An International Sports events such as Olympics Games is still a honour for the country which acommadate it. First of all, it's give to the host the possibility to rise his tourism numbers. For Instance, when you become an host, each people who wants to see the Olympics games would try to have some ticket and will need to travel till your country. In a economic way that is the moment for the country to be focused on all their touristics activities and hotels so as to give the envy to people to comeback there even if sports events is over. Subsequently, the other points is the fact that, hosting an International events requires some hiring. Therefore, people will get a job more easilier due to the necessity to create by example new infrastructures such as soccer stadium. We have seen that with the Qatar's Olympics Games where a new soccer stadium was inaugurated to accomodate events. However, there is some negative points. Let's talk about the first which is for me one of the most important, the pollution. Massive tourism increase the rate of polution across the country. Tourist came all over the world and don't take care about garbages and so on. Moreover, each plastic and other poluants rise and sometimes create some issues especially with water across the countryside. In addition, the built of new infrastructure requires a soar of taxes for people living near or inside the International events areas. In a nutshell, is it interesting to host an international event, for some economic reasons nevertheless that create issues in a other side.
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sportifs
and players of the world. These kinds of
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events
is broadcasted
all around the globe and everyone as their eyes on it.
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Who
say
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automatically
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host
country.

By the way, we can ask ourselves, if hosting an
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international
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sports
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event
is
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a
advantage or an inconvenient for the
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host
country?

In the
first
part we are going to talk about the better future that can bring an
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International
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events
for a
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country
. Then, in the second part we will
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how that can have
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damage in the
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events
such as Olympics Games is
still
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acommadate
it.
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First of all
, it's give to the
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host
the possibility to rise his tourism numbers.
For Instance
, when you become
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an
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, each
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who
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the Olympics games would try to have
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ticket and will need to travel till your
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.
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that is
the moment for the
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country
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be focused
on all their
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touristics
activities and hotels
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give the envy to
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people
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there even if
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sports
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is over.

Subsequently
, the other points is the fact that, hosting an
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requires
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hiring.
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,
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people
will
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get
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easilier
due to the necessity to create by example new infrastructures such as soccer stadium. We have
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seen
that with the Qatar's Olympics Games where a new soccer stadium
was inaugurated
to
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accomodate
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events
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, there is
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which is for me one of the most
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, the pollution. Massive tourism increase the rate of
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polution
across the
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. Tourist came all over the world and don't take care about
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garbages
and
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so
on.
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, each plastic and other
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poluants
rise and
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sometimes
create
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some
issues
especially
with water across the countryside.

In addition
, the built of new infrastructure requires a soar of taxes for
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people
living near or inside the
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International
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events
areas.

In a nutshell, is it interesting to
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host
an
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international
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event
, for
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economic reasons
nevertheless
that create issues in
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a
other side.
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IELTS essay International sports games

Essay
  American English
8 paragraphs
376 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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