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Some people say that computers have made life easier and more convenient. Other people say that computers have made life more complex and stressful. What is your opinion? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Some people say that the invention of computers is one of the greatest humankind's inventions. However, other people think that computers make their life more stressful. I agree with those people who think that computers brought many benefits and play a very important role in our modern life. First of all, every company nowadays uses a computer to store its data and make different kinds of operations. It is very difficult to imagine life without computers. A company would have to store millions of papers and documents. Moreover, a customer would have to wait hours to check his balance or get a piece of information about his transactions at his bank, while an employee was looking trough those papers. Another important aspect of this is that people are able to type all their information, make corrections, print or send documents using computers. It makes life much easier. One can spend the rest of the time watching TV with his family or working on something new. We use computers every day sometimes even not knowing it. When we go to a store and use our credit cards many computers process our information and perform transactions. When we need to get some cash we use money access machines that are computerized too. Second of all, computers provided a great means of communication - the Internet. I think it is the most easiest and cheapest way to get in touch with relatives, friends, business colleagues, etc. Nowadays the world becomes smaller and smaller. When I was a little girl, I could not imagine that it would be possible to communicate with people from all around the world in so easy way. A person can get latest news, become friends with someone from another country, find his old friends, ask for a piece of advice, etc. Finally, in addition to these practical benefits people can shopping without leaving their house. They just use an Internet access, a computer and their cards to make a payment. It is kind of difficult to imagine that a few years ago people had to spend their time in lines buying tickets. Now, a person can choose a destination, company, date and time and get tickets delivered to his door. I think it is amazing. To sum up, I believe that computers made our lives easier. They change our attitude towards life. I think with the invention of computers people became closer and friendlier.
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a computer to store its data and
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kinds of operations. It is
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difficult to imagine
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life
without computers. A
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store millions of papers and documents.
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wait hours to
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a piece of information about his transactions at his bank, while an employee was looking
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are able to type all their information,
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corrections, print or
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documents using computers. It
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life
much easier. One can spend the rest of the time watching TV with his family or working on something new.

We
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computers every day
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even not knowing it. When we go to a store and
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our credit cards
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computers process our information and perform transactions.
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cash we
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money access machines that
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Second of all, computers provided a great means of communication
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the Internet. I
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it is the
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most easiest
and cheapest way to
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in touch with relatives, friends, business colleagues, etc. Nowadays the world becomes smaller and smaller. When I was a
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little
girl, I could not imagine that it would be possible to communicate with
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people
from all around the world in
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easy way. A person can
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friends,
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can shopping without leaving their
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an Internet access, a computer and their cards to
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a payment. It is kind of difficult to imagine that a few years ago
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people
had to spend their time in lines buying tickets.
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Now
, a person can choose a destination,
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, date and time and
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get
tickets delivered to his door. I
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think
it is amazing.

To sum up, I believe that computers made our
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easier. They
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change
our attitude towards
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. I
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with the invention of computers
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people
became closer and friendlier.
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IELTS essay Some people say that computers have made life easier and more convenient. Other people say that computers have made life more complex and stressful. What is your opinion? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
405 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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