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some people say that children should follow the parents, other says that children should follow teachers, discuss both the views and give your opinion.

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people who believe in following to parents insist to be obedient to parents more and inculcate the habits and culture as per the guidance of parents, while others enforce to follow teachers to know more widely about the life and people with whom they interact and can understand well. I would discuss both and write my opinion at the end. it is viewed that, children are the mirror of the family and society. their habits, behavior, practices of a culture, and adoption of modernization depend upon on parents' or teachers' role. it is seen that parents play the leading role to guide children better. As per their suggestion and instruction, children follow when to get up, to behave with neighbors and follow dresses and instill the cultural values in them. However, the efficacy of children grooming is seen widely by following teachers who drive them to the next level of thinking which children acknowledge because of their right justification on the adoption of several practices, which are not advised by the parents at all. on the other hand, subject experts no doubt infuse new culture and other advanced changes they find in the generation and school goers also, find them appropriate following in life. Morden lifestyle and development in getting liberal to the customs and traditions practices are the key new changes teacher preach to children while teaching them value-added lessons of life. However, whether it is viable to live with them and adopt majorly depend on children and parents discussion and understanding, it is observed that the influence of the parents lead children to live a far happier life, as they live with them for years. to conclude, out of these two discussions, my view is the parental role is more influencing because life living with parents and their practices are key reasons to be happier in life rather than acknowledging teachers.
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people
who believe in following to
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parents
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insist to be
obedient to
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parents
more and inculcate the habits and culture as per the guidance of
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parents
, while others enforce to follow
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teachers
to know more
widely
about the
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life
and
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people
with whom they interact and can understand well. I would discuss both and write my opinion at the
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end
.

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it
is viewed
that,
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children
are the mirror of the family and society.
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their
habits, behavior,
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practices
of a culture, and adoption of modernization depend upon on parents' or teachers' role.
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it
is
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seen
that
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parents
play the leading role to guide
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children
better. As per their suggestion and instruction,
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children
follow when to
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get
up, to behave with neighbors and follow dresses and instill the cultural values in them.
However
, the efficacy of
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children
grooming is
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seen
widely
by following
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teachers
who drive them to the
next
level of thinking which
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children
acknowledge
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because
of their right justification on the adoption of several
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practices
, which are not advised by the
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parents
at all.

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on
the other hand, subject experts no doubt infuse new culture and other advanced
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changes
they find in the generation and school goers
also
, find them appropriate following in
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life
.
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Morden
lifestyle and development in getting liberal to the customs and traditions
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practices
are the key new
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changes
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teacher
preach to
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children
while teaching them value-
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added
lessons of
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life
.
However
, whether it is viable to
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live
with them and adopt
majorly
depend on
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children
and
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parents
discussion and understanding, it
is observed
that the influence of the
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parents
lead
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children
to
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live
a far happier
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life
, as they
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live
with them for years.

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to
conclude, out of these two discussions, my view is the parental role is more influencing
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because
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life
living with
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parents
and their
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practices
are key reasons to be happier in
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life
rather
than acknowledging
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teachers
.
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IELTS essay some people say that children should follow the parents, other says that children should follow teachers,

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  American English
4 paragraphs
313 words
6.0
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