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Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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A number of people believe that commercials induce people to make purchases; others feel that advertisements have become so commonplace that we simply ignore them. This essay discusses both of these perspectives, and why I believe that the case for the power of advertising is stronger. There are two main arguments to support the strong influence of advertising. The first is that whatever gets advertised heavily seems to get purchased the most. We can see that the most popular brands of products that are advertised on TV and the Internet also seem to be the ones people are purchasing. Another popular argument is that companies would not advertise if it did not lead to sales. Commercials are extremely expensive and as companies keep running them, they must be successful otherwise the expenditure could not be justified. However, a number of individualsargue that we no longer pay attention to adverts. They argue that people do not see commercials on television due to the fact they switch to other tasks whenever they appear. For instance, when there is a commercial break during a TV show people frequently use it as an opportunity for a food run. Moreover, when people cannot avoid advertising they merely ignore it. For instance, people have become so accustomed to popups and marketing content on the right side of the computer screen that they tend to merely ignore anything that occupies this space. In conclusion, I believe that both sides of the argument have merits. However, the case for the power of advertising is stronger. I think this is in light of the fact that advertising constantly evolves and finds creative ways to attract our attention and convince us of the need to buy a product.
A number of
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people
believe that commercials induce
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people
to
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make
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purchases
; others feel that advertisements have become
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so
commonplace that we
simply
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ignore
them. This essay discusses both of these perspectives, and why I believe that the case for the power of advertising is stronger.

There are two main arguments to support the strong influence of advertising. The
first
is that whatever
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gets
advertised
heavily
seems to
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get
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purchased
the most. We can
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see
that the most popular brands of products that
are advertised
on TV and the Internet
also
seem to be the ones
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people
are purchasing. Another popular argument is that
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companies
would not advertise if it did not lead to sales. Commercials are
extremely
expensive and as
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companies
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keep
running them, they
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must
be successful
otherwise
the expenditure could not
be justified
.

However
, a number of
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individualsargue
that we no longer pay attention to adverts. They argue that
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people
do not
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see
commercials on television due to the fact they switch to other tasks whenever they appear.
For instance
, when there is a
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commercial
break during a TV
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show
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people
frequently
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use
it as an opportunity for a food run.
Moreover
, when
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people
cannot avoid advertising they
merely
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ignore
it.
For instance
,
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people
have become
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so
accustomed to popups and marketing content on the right side of the computer screen that they tend to
merely
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ignore
anything that occupies this space.

In conclusion
, I believe that both sides of the argument have merits.
However
, the case for the power of advertising is stronger. I
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think
this is in light of the fact that advertising
constantly
evolves and finds creative ways to attract our attention and convince us of the need to
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buy
a product.

IELTS essay Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
288 words
6.0
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