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Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy new things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both view and give your own opinion?

Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy new things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. NJxg
Advertisement is one of the most successful ways to make people aware about new product and services. It also influences people to buy new things. However, some individuals believe advertisement has become extremely common and as a result people do not look at them seriously. To begin with, there are so many product and services available in the world. Humans do not know about all of them. When people look at advertisement they know about its existence and buy it if required. Sometimes companies also make advertisement to stay relevant. Because if they stop promoting their products than buyers will not remember them and may not buy their products in future. To give an example, there was a restaurant in my hometown known as ‘Janshi’. Their food and service was really very excellent. But due to lack of promotion they could not attract huge customers and compete with other famous restaurants. Ultimately, they shut their business down couple of years ago. On the opposite view, advertisement has become highly common in today’s world. There are so many methods to promote goods and services like print media, electronic media, social media and others. Companies also promote their products by placing banners and posters on the street. Because of that every human are forced to watch so many promotional activities everyday that at one point they become tired of watching this. They do not want to see any more publicity of goods and services. For example, few viewers always skip advertisement when they watch TV. To conclude, I think advertisement is needed. Without it promoting goods and services will be highly difficult. But at the same time advertisement should not influence people to buy unnecessary things.
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people
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buy
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,
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some
individuals believe
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advertisement
has become
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people
do not look at them
seriously
.

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product
and
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services
available in the world. Humans do not know about all of them. When
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people
look at
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advertisement
they know about its existence and
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buy
it if required.
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companies
also
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advertisement
to stay relevant.
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if they
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stop
promoting their
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products
than buyers will not remember them and may not
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their
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Janshi
’. Their food and
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service
was
really
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very
excellent.
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due to lack of promotion they could not attract huge customers and compete with other
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famous
restaurants.
Ultimately
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couple of
years ago.

On the opposite view,
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advertisement
has become
highly
common in
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today
’s world. There are
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so
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many
methods to promote
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goods
and
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services
like print media, electronic media, social media
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.
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Companies
also
promote their
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products
by placing banners and posters on the street.
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of that every human
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to
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promotional activities
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that at one point they become tired of watching this. They do not want to
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see
any more publicity of
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goods
and
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services
.
For example
, few viewers always skip
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advertisement
when they
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watch
TV.

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, I
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think
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advertisement
is needed
. Without it promoting
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goods
and
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services
will be
highly
difficult.
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But
at the same time
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advertisement
should not influence
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people
to
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buy
unnecessary things.
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IELTS essay Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy new things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it.

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