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Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with?

Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? yXa33
Advertisements are one of the mediums to educate and create a need about a certain product, place and practically anything that money can buy. With the onset of electronic communication, advertisements can be presented through televisions, the internet, telephones, mobile phones etc. But, so to speak practically everything in this world comes with its pro and cons. Advertisements are one of the aspects of revenue generation for organizations worldwide. For an organization to thrive and succeed it has to find a way to let people know about its products. Advertisements are a way to do that. Some advertisements are quite compelling in nature which makes a consumer buy the product even if he or she does not need it. One such example is an insurance product. Insurance companies advertise their insurance offerings through television or the internet that creates a sense of urgency or scare which makes consumers think that they have not done enough to secure the future of their families. Consumers fall prey to their big talks given through advertisements and don't look through the fine lines of its terms and conditions which are not advertised or discussed by the insurance agents. Consumers eventually buy insurance that may not be needed. Ultimately, insurance organizations get a portion of the premium paid as their commission and when the time comes to reimburse the consumers these organisations come up with a lot of technicalities or terms that consumers might not be aware of. Some advertisements too have their advantages. With the ongoing covid-19 pandemic, there is a need for citizens around the globe to get immunized as soon as possible. Advertisements about the vaccines from governmental organizations and pharmaceutical companies educate people about its benefits and side effects. Therefore, it helps people know what to expect and eventually helps improve living conditions. In addition, advertisements about how to follow certain protocols during the pandemic are an added benefit that shows the efforts taken by the governing bodies and pharmaceutical companies to keep people safe. Advertisements are necessary in this age as a lot of consumers around the world rely on electronic media for their source of information for many products. Organizations should not show misleading advertisements to boost their sales. On the other hand, if numerous unnecessary restrictions are imposed on advertisements it would be difficult for organizations to thrive in this global market and eventually it would have an impact on global economies. Eventually, consumers alone can decide which advertisements are beneficial or not beneficial for them.
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Advertisements
are one of the mediums to educate and create a need about a certain
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product
, place and
practically
anything that money can
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buy
. With the onset of electronic communication,
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advertisements
can
be presented
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through
televisions, the internet, telephones, mobile phones etc.
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But
,
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so
to speak
practically
everything in this world
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comes
with its pro and cons.

Advertisements are one of the aspects of revenue generation for
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organizations
worldwide. For an
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organization
to thrive and succeed it
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has to
find a way to
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let
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people
know about its
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products
.
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Advertisements
are a way to do that.
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Some
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advertisements
are quite compelling in nature which
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makes
a
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consumer
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buy
the
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product
even if he or she does not need it. One such example is an
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insurance
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product
.
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Insurance
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companies
advertise their
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insurance
offerings
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through
television or the internet that creates a sense of urgency or scare which
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makes
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consumers
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think
that they have not done
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enough
to secure the future of their families.
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Consumers
fall prey to their
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big
talks
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given
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through
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advertisements
and don't look
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through
the fine lines of its terms and conditions which are not advertised or discussed by the
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insurance
agents.
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Consumers
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eventually
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buy
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insurance
that may not
be needed
.
Ultimately
,
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insurance
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organizations
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get
a portion of the premium paid as their commission and when the time
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comes
to reimburse the
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consumers
these
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organisations
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come
up with
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a lot of
technicalities or terms that
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consumers
might not be aware of.

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Some
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advertisements
Did you mean "to have"?
too have
their advantages. With the ongoing
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covid-19
pandemic, there is a need for citizens around the globe to
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get
immunized as
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soon
as possible.
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Advertisements
about the vaccines from governmental
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organizations
and pharmaceutical
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companies
educate
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people
about its benefits and side effects.
Therefore
, it
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helps
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people
know what to
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expect
and
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eventually
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helps
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improve
living conditions.
In addition
,
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advertisements
about how to follow certain protocols during the pandemic are an
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added
benefit that
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shows
the efforts taken by the governing bodies and pharmaceutical
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companies
to
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keep
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people
safe.

Advertisements are necessary in this age as
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a lot of
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consumers
around the world rely on electronic media for their source of information for
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many
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products
.
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Organizations
should not
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show
misleading
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advertisements
to boost their sales.
On the other hand
, if numerous unnecessary restrictions
are imposed
on
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advertisements
it would be difficult for
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organizations
to thrive in this global market and
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eventually
it would have an impact on global economies.
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Eventually
,
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consumers
alone can decide which
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advertisements
are beneficial or not beneficial for them.
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IELTS essay Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with?

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418 words
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