Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with?

Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? pOJL
We are living in the world of advertisements. We are seeing advertisements everywhere. I think they have become part of our life. There are many channels for advertisements. Like TV, radios, mobile phones, banners on street. Because of advancement of technology, we are also seeing advertisements of mobile applications like facebook, whatsapp and many more. Everything which is new is good. I think advertisement is really helpful. They provide ease of like and make our like better. Advertisement helps to know about what new is being made, developed and keeping us to go with latest trends. There are many sectors which advertise their products i. e. grocery, mobile manufacturing units, agriculture, automobiles, electronics, entertainment and many more. If we talk about grocery, using advertisement we can know about new products are being introduced to market. We can easily compare their prices and buy which is cost effective and good. We can't know about latest mobiles or computers are being launched by companies if there is no advertisements. Even nowadays we are seeing advertisements for sale on TV. It is helping us to buy products with great price. For some channels on TV, advertisement is a source of income as well. They broadcast advertisement in exchange of money. I think we should know about bad impact of advertisement as well. If we see lot of advertisement of grocery and if we buy everything without checking its review then we will end up buying bad products. Some advertisements are false claiming their products. Advertisement are imaginary. They distract real truth. So better to check reviews before buying. Children are not aware about what is good and what is bad. They will start demanding about what they are seeing in advertisements. In mobile phones, advertisements are really big issues. If we search any product in browser, then we will start to see it's advertisement in all the mobile applications. You tube videos are never starting without some advertisements. I'm really exhausted with all advertisements. I think everything is good at some extent and bad at some extent. It depends on us how we are reacting to this. We should just watch advertisement and do not keep buying everything and believe what we are seeing in advertisement.
We are living in the world of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
advertisements
. We are seeing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
advertisements
everywhere. I
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
think
they have become part of our life. There are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
channels for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
advertisements
. Like TV, radios, mobile phones, banners on street.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Because
of advancement of technology, we are
also
seeing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
advertisements
of mobile applications like
Possible spelling mistake found.
facebook
,
Possible spelling mistake found.
whatsapp
and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
more.

Everything which is new is
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
good
. I
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
think
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
advertisement
is
really
helpful. They provide
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ease
of like and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
our like better.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Advertisement
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
know
about what new is
being made
, developed and keeping us to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
go with
A determiner is probably missing here: "the latest".
latest
trends. There are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
sectors which advertise their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
There should be no space here: "i.e.".
i. e.
grocery, mobile manufacturing units, agriculture, automobiles, electronics, entertainment and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
more. If we talk about grocery, using
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
advertisement
we can
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
know
about new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
are
being introduced
to market. We can
easily
compare their prices and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
which
is cost
effective and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
good
. We can't
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
know
about
A determiner is probably missing here: "the latest".
latest
mobiles or computers are
being launched
by
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
if there is no
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
advertisements
. Even nowadays we are seeing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
advertisements
for sale on TV. It is helping us to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
with great price. For
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
channels on TV,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
advertisement
is a source of income
as well
. They broadcast
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
advertisement
The usual prepositions to use after "in exchange" is "for" not "of". Did you mean "in exchange for"?
in exchange of
money.

I
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
think
we should
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
know
about
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bad
impact of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
advertisement
as well
. If we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
It seems that an article is missing.
lot of
The usual collocation for "advertisement" is "for" not "of". Did you mean "advertisement for"?
advertisement of
grocery and if we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
everything without checking its review then we will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
up buying
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bad
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
advertisements
are false claiming their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Advertisement
Consider using third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: "is".
are
imaginary. They distract real truth.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
better to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
check
reviews
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
buying. Children are not aware about what is
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
good
and what is
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bad
. They will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
demanding about what they are seeing in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
advertisements
. In mobile phones,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
advertisements
are
really
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
big
issues. If we search any
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
product
in browser, then we will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
it's
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
advertisement
in all the mobile applications.
This word is normally spelled as one.
You tube
videos are never starting without
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
advertisements
. I'm
really
exhausted with all advertisements.

I
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
think
everything is
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
good
at
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
extent and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bad
at
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
extent. It depends on us how we are reacting to this. We should
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
watch
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
advertisement
and do not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
buying everything and believe what we are seeing in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
advertisement
.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
373 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts