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Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Advertisement is the process by which companies promotes their product in the market. there is a different opinion by the people about the promotion as one group is in favor of another handsome people said that it is kind of enforcement to buy the undesired things. I completely agree that many times we do not need anything but due to the influence we purchase, I will explain what is the reason. First of all, we agree that things should be publicize to the targeted buyers, people who really need to get there requires items they can get required information about that product and sellers too but most of the times it has captured those people who did not have a requirement to buy. they just bought that they got influenced by that publication or the model took the part to display that product. For example advertisement of ladies clothes. Last Sunday my sister went to the mall for the grocery but she took 5 dresses and she spent 10, 000 rupees unnecessarily because she got influence by the model. Due to her wrong decision, we had to suffer in that month. Secondly, the advertisement never mentioned any side effect of their product, I remember my one of a neighbor she always keen to buy cosmetics, she saw one add about skin feeling tube on Facebook, she thought that after applying she will get the new and fresh skin so she made an order for it but she had to face adverse effect after applying that. In conclusion, people should not get impressed by all these advertisements must make a wise decision on the basis of the need and affordability before buying any item.
Advertisement
is the process by which
companies
promotes
their
product
in the market.
there
is a
different
opinion by the
people
about the promotion as one group is in favor of another handsome
people
said that it is kind of enforcement to
buy
the undesired things. I completely
agree
that
many
times we do not need anything
but
due to the influence we
purchase
, I will
explain
what is the reason.

First of all
, we
agree
that things should be
publicize
to the targeted buyers,
people
who
really
need to
get
there requires items they can
get
required information about that
product
and sellers too
but
most of the times
it has captured those
people
who did not have a requirement to
buy
.
they
just
bought
that they
got
influenced by that publication or the model took the part to display that
product
.
For example
advertisement of
ladies clothes. Last Sunday my sister went to the mall for the grocery
but
she took 5
dresses and
she spent 10, 000 rupees
unnecessarily
because
she
got
influence by the model. Due to her
wrong
decision, we had to suffer in that month.

Secondly
, the
advertisement
never mentioned any side effect of their
product
, I remember my one of a neighbor she always keen to
buy
cosmetics, she
saw
one
add
about skin feeling tube on Facebook, she
thought
that after applying she will
get
the new and fresh skin
so
she made an order for it
but
she had to face adverse effect after applying that.

In conclusion
,
people
should not
get
impressed by all these
advertisements
must
make
a wise decision on the basis of the need and affordability
before
buying any item.
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IELTS essay Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with?

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283 words
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