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Some people say that a life-time prison is a good way to prevent crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Criminal activities cause relentless problems in the societies, from substantial costs to insecurity and even death. To avoid these problems, many strategies such as prolonged imprisonment are developed to lower the crime. Personally, I believe methods which address different scopes of crime would be more practical in this matter. Spending more years behind the bars may be a great way to reduce crime by scaring potential criminals and breaking their network. Before turning to crime, individuals estimate the penalty as if they get caught up. But what if the price is to be in prison too long to lose their youth and even family? Well, for many this is scary enough to give up on their criminal intentions. Additionally, most of the crime are reported to be carried out by a team of criminals. Keeping the accused in prison for longer duration can make the whole criminal network collapsed as one piece is left from the group, so there will not be any planned crime to commit. Although this method can be effective at some points, there are objections to it as it does not work on the roots of the crime, or there is a possibility for the prisoners to escape from their long prison punishment. While there are more practical strategies such as improved police force and education which can act as the most effective deterrent for the ones committing crime. Lack of monitoring in the cities, especially in crime-prone areas enables the criminals to break the law more easily as no one would recognize them. But if the government add to the number of police guards and surveillance cameras in the city, the offenders will not dare to commit crime. Additionally, many of the criminals come from dysfunctional environments where they have not been well-educated on social rules. If those people acquire how to behave properly in society and know the consequences of criminal activities, there are lower chances to commit crime. In doing so, different lessons regarding social laws and manners should be taught at schools to nurture obedient citizens. To conclude, I think only with strong presence of the police and proper education can a society reach lower rate of crime.
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Criminal
activities cause relentless problems in the societies, from substantial costs to insecurity and even death. To avoid these problems,
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many
strategies such as prolonged imprisonment
are developed
to lower the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
crime
.
Personally
, I believe methods which address
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different
scopes of
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crime
would be more practical in this matter.

Spending more years behind the bars may be a great way to
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reduce
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crime
by scaring potential
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criminals
and breaking their network.
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Before
turning to
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crime
, individuals estimate the penalty as if they
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get
caught up.
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But
what if the price is to be in prison too long to lose their youth and even family? Well, for
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many
this is scary
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enough
to give up on their
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criminal
intentions.
Additionally
, most of the
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crime
are reported
to
be carried
out by a team of
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criminals
. Keeping the accused in prison for longer duration can
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make
the whole
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criminal
network collapsed as one piece is
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left
from the group,
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so
there will not be any planned
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crime
to commit. Although this method can be effective at
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some
points, there are objections to it as it does not work on the roots of the
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crime
, or there is a possibility for the prisoners to escape from their long prison punishment.

While there are more practical strategies such as
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improved
police force and education which can act as the most effective deterrent for the ones committing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
crime
. Lack of monitoring in the cities,
especially
in crime-prone areas enables the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
criminals
to break the law more
easily
as no one would recognize them.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
But
if the
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government
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add
to the number of police guards and surveillance cameras in the city, the offenders will not dare to commit
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crime
.
Additionally
,
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many
of the
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criminals
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come
from dysfunctional environments where they have not been well-educated on social
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rules
. If those
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people
acquire how to behave
properly
in society and know the consequences of
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criminal
activities, there are lower chances to commit
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
crime
. In doing
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
,
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different
lessons regarding social laws and manners should
be taught
at schools to nurture obedient citizens.

To conclude
, I
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think
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only
with strong presence of the police and proper education can a society reach lower rate of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
crime
.
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IELTS essay Some people say that a life-time prison is a good way to prevent crime.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
366 words
6.0
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