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It is said that watching TV is a waste of time for children. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this idea. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this idea.

It is said that watching TV is a waste of time for children. with this idea. with this idea. Gwj02
Some people believe that watching too much television is waste of time for children. In my opinion, I disagree with this idea for many reasons which will be described in the following paragraphs. Firstly, there are a lot of television programs not only essential but also entertaining. Some children’s program develops ability and children’s skill. For example, some sort of cartoon program recently helps their improve new vocabulary so they can learn how to spell and pronounce those words. In addition, some people think learning from teachers or books are suitable for children more than television. However, the children can learn so much of thing what they cannot learn from the book. Such as explored the world by watching the wildlife’s program. Books can provide only the photos which they can imagine. On the other hand, television provide not even photo but video and sound. They can explore the world through this program that make more fun and more realistic.
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new vocabulary
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they can learn how to spell and pronounce those words.

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learning from teachers or books are suitable for
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.
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can learn
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much of thing what they cannot learn from the book. Such as explored the world by watching the wildlife’s
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program
. Books can provide
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only
the photos which they can imagine.
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,
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provide not even photo
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video and sound. They can explore the world through this
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more fun and more realistic.
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IELTS essay It is said that watching TV is a waste of time for children. with this idea. with this idea.

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
160 words
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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