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some people say music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

some people say music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. with this opinion. RLKQ
We live in an era where technology is advanced. Along with its progress of the technology its self, there are so much benefits that we can gain from it and music is one of them. Music has been existing in our country for centuries. People loves music because it is an entertaiment for them. Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of diffrent cultures and ages together. i am a person who does not listen to music. But some people cannot be seperated from it everyday. I know a guy that reaaly loves music and he really good in singing. Of course it is a thing because from music he knows that he can make something from it. He has so many followers on his tiktok account. there are many different of ages on his followers. It can be conclude that my friends has been successfully on spreading positive energy that he has into his tiktok videos. Music bring a lot of good things to us. But there are also the negative things that music can brings to us. Some people misused music and resulting a bad side of music. there are some language that prohibited to some ages. there are also music that accidentally teach us bad things and resulting to bad behaviors. It is good to catch up with outside world, but we have to be more carefull with the cultures that the thing might brings. fatih raizan zachli 12 mipa 10 oke
We
live
in an era where technology
is advanced
. Along with its progress of the technology its self, there are
so
much
benefits that we can gain from it and
music
is one of them.
Music
has been existing in our country for centuries.
People
loves
music
because
it is an
entertaiment
for them.
Some
people
say that
music
is a
good
way of bringing
people
of
diffrent
cultures and ages together.

i
am a person who does not listen to
music
.
But
some
people
cannot be
seperated
from it
everyday
. I know a guy that
reaaly
loves
music and
he
really
good in singing
. Of
course it
is a thing
because
from
music
he knows that he can
make
something from it. He has
so
many
followers on his
tiktok
account.
there
are
many
different
of ages on his followers. It can be
conclude
that my friends has been
successfully
on spreading
positive
energy that he has into his
tiktok
videos.

Music
bring
a lot of
good
things to us.
But
there are
also
the
negative
things that
music
can
brings
to us.
Some
people
misused
music
and resulting a
bad
side of
music
.
there
are
some
language that prohibited to
some
ages.
there
are
also
music
that
accidentally
teach us
bad
things and resulting to
bad
behaviors.

It is
good
to catch up with outside world,
but
we
have to
be more
carefull
with the cultures that the thing might brings.
fatih
raizan
zachli
12
mipa
10
oke
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IELTS essay some people say music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. with this opinion.

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