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Small businesses are disappearing and being replaced by large multinational companies. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Small businesses are disappearing and being replaced by large multinational companies. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? AAY3
Nowadays, large multinational firms are forcing small businesses to vanish and taking over their position in the market. I believe, multinational companies have more benefits than drawbacks. This essay will discuss how the advantages of multinational companies outweigh the disadvantages. Putting light on the advantages of multinational companies first and foremost is established multinational companies in the local area can generate job opportunities. For example, companies need workers for construction of plants, to start production, and other essential activities. Also, multinational companies contribution to developing surrounding areas of plants such as, other small companies who are depending on these big multinational companies for import and export. For instance, in Gujarat, many multinational car companies started manufacturing cars and other depending companies are also settled around multinational companies and offering jobs in the local market. Moreover, multinational companies provide all standard quality products around the globe in the indigenous market and reduce the price of products which are manufacture in their local plants and also, increase production capacity by masses workers and items are easily available for people. However, there are some drawbacks of this scenario and first one is set foot in the local market by multinational companies would effects on small scale local businesses by losing jobs of people who depended on these small businesses, such as small scale cotton industries are vanished by large cotton companies to replace manpower to machines. Furthermore, multinational companies and their plants are more responsible for pollution. For instance, large plants emission toxic gases in air also disposal waste chemical water in the river and this kind of actions can result as, surrounding land, water, and air of plants would be more pollutant than ago. In conclusion, it can be said that if multinational companies come into the country, it will benefits to everyone and take part in the growth of the nation. While multinational companies may be influenced on small businesses and, also on the environment.
Nowadays, large
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multinational
firms are forcing
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small
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businesses
to vanish and taking over their position in the
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market
. I believe,
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multinational
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companies
have more benefits than drawbacks. This essay will discuss how the advantages of
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multinational
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companies
outweigh the disadvantages.

Putting light on the advantages of
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multinational
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companies
first
and foremost
is established
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multinational
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companies
in the
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local
area can generate job opportunities.
For example
,
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companies
need workers for construction of
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plants
, to
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start
production, and other essential activities.
Also
,
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multinational
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companies
contribution to developing surrounding areas of
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plants
such as, other
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small
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companies
who
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are depending
on these
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big
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multinational
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companies
for import and export.
For instance
, in Gujarat,
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many
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multinational
car
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companies
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started
manufacturing cars and other
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depending
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companies
are
also
settled around
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multinational
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companies
and offering jobs in the
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local
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market
.
Moreover
,
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multinational
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companies
provide all standard quality products around the globe

in the indigenous
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market
and
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reduce
the price of products which are manufacture in their
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local
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plants
and
also
, increase production capacity by masses workers and items are
easily
available for
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people
.

However
, there are
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some
drawbacks of this scenario and
first
one
is set
foot in the
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local
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market
by
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multinational
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companies
would
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effects
on
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small
scale
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local
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businesses
by losing jobs of
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people
who depended on these
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small
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businesses
, such as
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small
scale cotton industries
are vanished
by large cotton
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companies
to replace manpower to machines.
Furthermore
,
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multinational
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companies
and their
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plants
are more responsible for pollution.
For instance
, large
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plants
emission toxic gases in air
also
disposal waste chemical water in the river and this kind of actions can result as, surrounding land, water, and air of
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plants
would be more pollutant than ago.

In conclusion
, it can
be said
that if
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multinational
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companies
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come
into the country, it will
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benefits
to everyone and
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take part
in the growth of the nation. While
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multinational
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companies
may
be influenced
on
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small
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businesses
and,
also
on the environment.
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IELTS essay Small businesses are disappearing and being replaced by large multinational companies. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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