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Some people say life in the city is healthier than in the countryside, while many think that the opposite is true. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

Some people say life in the city is healthier than in the countryside, while many think that the opposite is true. Discuss both views and give your own opinion q5OBP
It is a truth universally that there is a controversy between life in megacities and countrysides. From my perspective, both have their pros and cons, so that this essay will clarify these circumstances. For the first instance about living in the city, due to the developed urbanization, people have a tendency to choose urban areas for a living. To the best of my knowledge, life in big cities can support humans full of high-level appliances. Automatic devices and some expensive kinds of stuff such as cars, international cloth brands are widely owned and used by residents. Secondly, pollution, however, is a big consideration for people who wants to live there. because of the traffic density, which leads to the amount of carbon dioxide increase significantly in the atmosphere. Traffic jams, the high number of criminals are some negative sides that make people hesitate to make decisions. On the other hand, rural areas do not have contamination problems in fact. Freedom of traffic makes the weather clean and fresh, which the rural living becomes peaceful and quiet. Moreover, the countryside devoid of any toxic pollutants, traffic jams, or smog that is extremely beneficial for the health of the people. Apart from some positive, there are also has negative. Life in rural areas can not create options for business or industry, the rate of unemployment is much higher in the countryside. Humans depend on farming and spend most of their time in the fields. Finally, internet and television services can be patchy or weaker in the village areas, this is considered a basic necessity in urban living. In conclusion, whether living in cities areas or rural ones has some advantages and disadvantages thing to be considered. I, however, believe that living in urban is outweigh in the countryside.
It is a truth
universally
that there is a controversy between life in
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megacities
and
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countrysides
. From my perspective, both have their pros and cons,
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so
that this essay will clarify these circumstances.

For the
first
instance about
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living
in the city, due to the developed urbanization,
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people
have a tendency to choose urban
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areas
for a
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living
. To the best of my knowledge, life in
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big
cities can support humans full of high-level appliances. Automatic devices and
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some
expensive kinds of stuff such as cars, international cloth brands are
widely
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owned
and
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used
by residents.
Secondly
, pollution,
however
, is a
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big
consideration for
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people
who
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wants
to
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live
there.
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because
of the
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traffic
density, which leads to the amount of carbon dioxide increase
significantly
in the atmosphere.
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Traffic
jams, the high number of criminals are
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some
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negative
sides that
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make
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people
hesitate to
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make
decisions.

On the other hand
,
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rural
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areas
do not have contamination problems in fact. Freedom of
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traffic
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makes
the weather clean and fresh, which the
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rural
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living
becomes peaceful and quiet.
Moreover
, the
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countryside
devoid of any toxic pollutants,
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traffic
jams, or smog
that is
extremely
beneficial for the health of the
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people
. Apart from
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some
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positive
, there are
also
has
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negative
. Life in
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rural
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areas
can not create options for business or industry, the rate of unemployment is much higher in the
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countryside
. Humans depend on farming and spend most of their time in the fields.
Finally
, internet and television services can be patchy or weaker in the village
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areas
, this
is considered
a basic necessity in urban living.

In conclusion
, whether
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living
in cities
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areas
or
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rural
ones has
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some
advantages and disadvantages thing to
be considered
. I,
however
, believe that
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living
in urban is
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outweigh
in the
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countryside
.
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IELTS essay Some people say life in the city is healthier than in the countryside, while many think that the opposite is true. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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