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Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. 1jx7
One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is History subject. It is undeniable that this subject has become an essential part of our life. However, there is no absolute agreement on whether history subject is one of the most important subject in school, while others think that subjects like Science and Technology are more important. A commonly held belief is that history is significant subject. As evidence of this, that we can use this lesson to know the history better and learn about the times of our grandparents and not only with this lesson we appreciate what we have. After all in the past people did not even have the money to buy bread they starved and they are brutally killed. It could be explained by the fact that, in the past there were so many wars and people fought bloody without understanding what peace of. All this is told in history subject, that making students smarter and they will know what happened in the past. On the other hand, some people claim that science and technology are more important, than history subject. For instance, we know that 21 century is century of technology. Our generation is more focusing on this and they may mention that all wars and some historical dates do not effect on student’s education. Nowadays, students do not need history subject because subjects like science and technology help to develop students skills and they want to build a good life for themselves by studying these subjects. After all technology and science is our future and everything depends on it. In conclusion, taking everything mentioned, I would agree that technology and science are necessary in modern society but we must not forget about our past and historical moments that turned the world around, so that in the future we know who we are and we must remember the hard work of our grandparents.
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widely
discussed issues nowadays is
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History
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. It is undeniable that this
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subject
has become an essential part of our life.
However
, there is no absolute agreement on whether
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history
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subject
is one of the most
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important
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subject
in school, while others
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are more
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.

A
commonly
held belief is that
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history
is significant
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subject
. As evidence of this, that we can
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use
this lesson to
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know
the
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history
better and learn about the times of our grandparents and not
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only
with this lesson we appreciate what we have.
After all
in the past
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people
did not even have the money to
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buy
bread they
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starved and
they are
brutally
killed. It could be
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explained
by the fact that, in the past there were
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so
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many
wars and
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people
fought bloody without understanding what peace of. All this is
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told
in
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history
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, that making
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students
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smarter and
they will
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know
what happened in the past.

On the other hand
,
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claim that
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and
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are more
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important
, than
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history
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subject
.
For instance
, we
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know
that
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21 century
is century of
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technology
. Our generation is more focusing on
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this and
they may mention that all wars and
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some
historical dates do not
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on
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student’s
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students
do not need
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history
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help
to develop
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students
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skills and
they want to build a
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good
life for themselves by studying these
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subjects
.
After all
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technology
and
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is our future and everything depends on it.

In conclusion
, taking everything mentioned, I would
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that
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technology
and
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are necessary in modern society
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but
we
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must
not forget about our past and historical moments that turned the world around,
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so
that in the future we
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know
who we
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are and
we
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must
remember the
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hard
work of our grandparents.
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IELTS essay Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History.

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