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Some people said that it is essential for children to do domestic work as long as they have the ability to do it. I purely agree with this statement

Some people said that it is essential for children to do domestic work as long as they have the ability to do it. I purely agree with this statement raQgo
Some people said that it is essential for children to do domestic work as long as they have the ability to do it. I purely agree with this statement. On the one hand, doing household work can develop children’s independence and responsibility. When adults let their son or daughter get access to housework, the children will work independently and avoid laziness. If parents don’t talk them doing these works, they will be dependant on the adults till the end. The youngsters who are always depending on their parents would be not able to live without being helped, that affect pessimistically for themselves in particular and society in general. Moreover, by doing domestic work, children can shape their responsibility. Thanks to doing households, youngsters know more about the importance of this work and respond for their tasks. On the other hand, doing housework helps children have a purposeful life. When having done work themselves and have been paid high compliments, they would feel like being motivated. And children will have been found that they are helpful to others. Thus, youngsters would try to do those work to be praised, it makes them identify what to do and doing every day. Besides that, helping their parents with household also let their purposeful living habits. These habits make them think carefully before doing to guarantee the work will be done perfectly and not be lingered. In short, I believed that children should help their parents doing household work so as to be comprehensive development.
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said that it is essential for
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children
to do domestic
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work
as long as they have the ability to do it. I
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household
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can develop
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children’s
independence and responsibility. When adults
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let
their son or daughter
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get
access to housework, the
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children
will
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work
independently
and avoid laziness. If
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parents
don’t talk them
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doing
these works, they will be
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dependant
on the adults till the
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end
. The youngsters who are always depending on their
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parents
would be not able to
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live
without being
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helped
, that affect
pessimistically
for themselves
in particular
and society
in general
.
Moreover
, by
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doing
domestic
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work
,
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children
can shape their responsibility. Thanks to
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doing
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households
, youngsters know more about the importance of this
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work
and respond for their tasks.

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,
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doing
housework
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helps
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children
have a purposeful life. When having done
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work
themselves and have
been paid
high compliments, they would feel like
being motivated
. And
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children
will have
been found
that they are helpful to others.
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, youngsters would try to do those
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work
to
be praised
, it
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makes
them identify what to do and
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doing
every day.
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that, helping their
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parents
with
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household
also
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let
their purposeful living habits. These habits
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make
them
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think
carefully
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before
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doing
to guarantee the
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work
will
be done
perfectly
and not
be lingered
.

In short, I believed that
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children
should
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help
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parents
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household
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work
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IELTS essay Some people said that it is essential for children to do domestic work as long as they have the ability to do it. I purely agree with this statement

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
251 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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