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Some people prefer to work same job throughout their life while others like to change jobs. To what extend do you agree or disagree v.1

Some people prefer to work same job throughout their life while others like to change jobs. v. 1
It is often observed that some people willing to stay in the same company for their entire life, whereas there are some who likes to switch over to other firms after a certain period. In my opinion, I agree to move to other work to gain more knowledge and for better remuneration. To begin with, moving to other conglomerates will help the person to learn new technology. In other words, they will have the opportunity to show their talents and improve their career growth. Being an employee in the same company will not have any technical growth and they must do the same monotonous job, but they will have the job security. Moreover, switching to other concerns will enhance their cognitive and problem-solving skills to build their future. For example, in the Information Technology field most of the people move to other multinational companies to get good exposure and prove their skills for their growth. Thus, joining other firms will provide the platform for the people to study and implement new things and ladder for their career. Admittedly, switching to other firms will provide hike in their salary. That is to say that their education and experience in the certain field will be in demand and hence their wages will also get increased when moving to another company. But there will not be any immediate increment in the amount when people willing to work in the same job. For instance, a recent survey report provided by Indian government states that people doing the same work for ages are not getting any recognition and the increment in their salaries is less. Therefore, in order to survive in this competitive world, earning good amount will make the people to live a moderate lifestyle which can be achieved by switching their jobs. In conclusion, I wholeheartedly agree to change the job after certain years because it will help them to know new information about their work and to get increased salary packages which is essential for survival of themselves and their families.
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observed that
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people
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company
for their entire life, whereas there are
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some
who likes to switch over to
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other
firms after a certain period. In my opinion, I
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agree
to
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move
to
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other
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work
to gain more knowledge and for better remuneration.

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begin
with, moving to
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other
conglomerates will
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help
the person to learn new technology. In
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other
words, they will have the opportunity to
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show
their talents and
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improve
their career growth. Being an employee in the same
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company
will not have any technical
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growth and
they
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must
do the same monotonous
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job
,
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but
they will have the
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job
security.
Moreover
, switching to
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other
concerns will enhance their cognitive and problem-solving
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skills
to build their future.
For example
, in the Information Technology field most of the
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people
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move
to
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other
multinational
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companies
to
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get
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good
exposure and prove their
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skills
for their growth.
Thus
, joining
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other
firms will provide the platform for the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
to study and implement new things and ladder for their career.

Admittedly
, switching to
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other
firms will provide hike in their salary.
That is
to say that their education and experience in the certain field will be in demand and
hence
their wages will
also
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get
increased when moving to another
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company
.
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But
there will not be any immediate increment in the amount when
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people
willing to
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work
in the same
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job
.
For instance
, a recent survey report provided by Indian
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government
states that
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people
doing the same
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work
for ages are not getting any recognition and the increment in their salaries is less.
Therefore
, in order to survive in this competitive world, earning
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good
amount will
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make
the
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people
to
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live
a moderate lifestyle which can
be achieved
by switching their jobs.

In conclusion
, I
wholeheartedly
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agree
to
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change
the
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job
after certain years
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because
it will
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help
them to know new information about their
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work
and to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
increased salary packages which is essential for survival of themselves and their families.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people prefer to work same job throughout their life while others like to change jobs. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
339 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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