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Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

There are good reasons why some people feel the need to make significant changes to their life from time to time. However there are predominantly two contrasting view where a section of society vehemently deems that change is not esential in their while other emphasizes that added something in their life is very important. Apparently, various factors make a section of people advocate that people who love stability in life, hestitate to change their jobs, routines or lifestyle. First and foremost, they create a comfort zone at their workplace and do not want to come out of it. Secondly, they staying in the same job for a long time allows them to gain expertise in that field. They become source of knowledge and guidance for new employee. However, this prevents them from learning new skills or identifying their hidden talents. Thirdly, what it will be more if they will get tired of doing the same things again and again. This will lead to boredom and they may even lose interest in their job or routines. On the other hand, chainging jobs and routines frequently might seem daunting but it does not really have to be if one knows what one is doing. coming out of ones comfort zone is the only way to learn something new and explore new opportunities. while this might seem challenging, it will turn out to be a rewarding pursuit in the long run. Chiefly, Change gives a person exposure to various fields and opportunities to find a better job or better workplace. Furthermore, a change can represent a break with the past and an old routine which has become boring and predictąble. In my profound opinion, embracing change is essential to learn new things and realize our full potential. what's more, change makes our life more exciting.
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reasons why
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some
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people
feel the need to
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make
significant
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changes
to their
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life
from time to time.
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there are
predominantly
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vehemently
deems that
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change
is not
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esential
in their while other emphasizes that
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added
something in their
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life
is
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very
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important
.

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, various factors
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make
a section of
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people
advocate that
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people
who
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love
stability in
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life
,
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hestitate
to
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change
their
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jobs
, routines or lifestyle.
First
and foremost, they create a comfort zone at their workplace and do not want to
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come
out of it.
Secondly
,
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in the same
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job
for a long time
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allows
them to gain expertise in that field. They become source of knowledge and guidance for
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new
employee.
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, this
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prevents
them from learning
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new
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skills
or identifying their hidden talents.
Thirdly
, what it will be more if they will
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get
tired of doing the same things again and again. This will lead to
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boredom and
they may even lose interest in their
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job
or routines.

On the other hand
,
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chainging
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jobs
and routines
frequently
might seem daunting
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it does not
really
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have to
be if one knows what one is doing.
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coming
out of
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ones
comfort zone is the
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only
way to learn something
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new
and explore
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new
opportunities.
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while
this might seem challenging, it will turn out to be a rewarding pursuit in the long run.
Chiefly
,
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Change
gives a person exposure to various fields and opportunities to find a better
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job
or better workplace.
Furthermore
, a
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change
can represent a break with the past and an
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old
routine which has become boring and
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predictąble
.

In my profound opinion, embracing
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change
is essential to learn
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new
things and realize our full potential.
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what
's more,
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change
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makes
our
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life
more exciting.
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IELTS essay Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
302 words
5.5
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