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Some people prefer to live in the countryside or in a small town. Others prefer to live in a big city. Which place would you prefer to live in? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer. v.2

Some people prefer to live in the countryside or in a small town. Others prefer to live in a big city. Which place would you prefer to live in? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer. v. 2
Living in the countryside has some advantages, such as clean environment and lack of traffic problems. However, I personally prefer to live in a big city. The reasons why I hold this stance will be elaborated in the paragraphs below. One of the reasons is that in a big city such as Moscow, people have myriad of feasibilities to gain career growth. There are a lot of different kind of businesses in the big cities. The main offices of the majority of the biggest companies concentered there. Moreover, these offices have scores of branches as well. If a person wants to advance through the ranks of a company in a fast pace, it is better to move to a the megapolis. Although people, who live in the countryside, can progress in the career too, they need much more time to do this because most of the companies located there are small and do not have a lot of position available. To that end, big cities are the best choice to live for the individuals who want to excel. Another reason is that life in a big city is very dynamic. There is a variety of theaters, stadiums and sport complexes to explore in the big city. Everyone there can find an activity he likes. My own experience illustrates it very well. I was living in Moscow as a student, and my leisure was always very dense. Visiting tremendous amount of the entertaining places and meeting new people helped me to stay busy all the time and enjoy life. If a person is very active and wants to obtain a lot of new friends, he needs to live in the big city. Despite on the opinion that in the countryside people can find things to do, mostly the life in there is not so astonishing and interesting as in the big city. So, life in the big city is full of the fascinating moments. To recapitulate, I feel that life in a big city is more advantageous. This is because people who live there have a lot of job opportunities and involved in the myriad of marvelous activities. All things considered, it is reasonable to assume that the big city in the best place to live.
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feasibilities
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for the individuals who want to excel.

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dynamic. There is a variety of theaters, stadiums and sport complexes to explore in the
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city. Everyone there can find an activity he likes. My
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experience illustrates it
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well. I was living in Moscow as a student, and my leisure was always
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dense. Visiting tremendous amount of the entertaining places and meeting new
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people
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helped
me to stay busy all the time and enjoy
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active and wants to obtain a
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of new friends, he needs to
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in the
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city. Despite on the opinion that in the countryside
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city.
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city is full of the fascinating moments.

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city is more advantageous. This is
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of job opportunities and involved in the myriad of marvelous activities. All things considered, it is reasonable to assume that the
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IELTS essay Some people prefer to live in the countryside or in a small town. Others prefer to live in a big city. Which place would you prefer to live in? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
375 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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