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Some people participate in extreme and dangerous sports. Why do people take part in dangerous sports. How could these sports be made safer.

Some people participate in extreme and dangerous sports. Why do people take part in dangerous sports. How could these sports be made safer. Pk86B
Giving attention towards games by masses which are risky for them. This essay will highlight the potential reasons why individuals are participating in it and providing the ways can be help to made safer these games. There are two main causes why these games are preferred by people. Firstly, some people who accept the new challenge in their life as marry com who is an Indian boxerand she injured so many time but she participated in this games because she wanted to prove herself. Secondly, people love to thriller and adventures activities. Although they know about the risk, these problem want to confront. For instance, one survey was conducted in India, in 2016 which revealed that people who have about the risk if people participate, result, either they face injuries or death still people are preferring these sports. There are some suggestions to deal with these games. One approach is professional training should be provided to people by trainer that help them to reduce the risk. Another mearsure which aid to solve this issue is government some rule and regulation regarding to support and safety. Apart from that, awareness of dangerous also help to people handle it easily. To conclude, this essay highlated that reasons behind this happening this games are activities for people who enjoy and new challenge which help to learn something as well as presented that points as properly provide the trainer and regulations which help to decline the risk.
Giving attention towards
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games
by masses which are risky for them. This essay will highlight the potential reasons why individuals are participating in it and providing the ways can be
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help
to made safer these
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games
. There are two main causes why these
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games
are preferred
by
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people
.
Firstly
,
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some
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people
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who
accept the new challenge in their life as marry com
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who
is an Indian
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boxerand
she injured
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so
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many time
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she participated in
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this
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games
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because
she wanted to prove herself.
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,
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people
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love
to thriller and adventures activities. Although they know about the
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risk
,
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these problem
want to confront.
For instance
, one survey
was conducted
in India, in 2016 which revealed that
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people
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who
have about the
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risk
if
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people
participate, result, either they face injuries or death
still
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people
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are preferring
these sports.

There are
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some
suggestions to deal with these
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games
. One approach is professional training should
be provided
to
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people
by trainer that
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help
them to
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reduce
the
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risk
. Another
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mearsure
which aid to solve this issue is
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government
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some
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rule
and regulation
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regarding to
support and safety. Apart from that, awareness of
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dangerous
also
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help
to
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people
handle it
easily
.

To conclude
, this essay
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highlated
that reasons behind this happening
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this
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games
are activities for
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people
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who
enjoy and new challenge which
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help
to learn something
as well
as presented that points as
properly
provide the trainer and regulations which
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help
to decline the
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risk
.
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IELTS essay Some people participate in extreme and dangerous sports. Why do people take part in dangerous sports. How could these sports be made safer.

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
243 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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