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Some people like to travel outside their country. Others would rathertravel to tourist spots in their own country first, before travellingabroad. Which do you prefer to do and why? Include specific detailsand examples to support your choice. v.8

Some people like to travel outside their country. Others would rathertravel to tourist spots in their own country first, before travellingabroad. Which do you prefer to do and why? Include specific detailsand examples to support your choice. v. 8
With the increase in the means of transportation, people like to explore more places in their vacations or leisure times. Some people like international trips whereas other like to visit the attractions within their own country before going to a place in another nation. Even, I would agree with the later preference of initial travelling within own country before going abroad. In this essay, I would discuss my viewpoints with relevant facts and examples that will justify my selection. There could be many reasons to go to different locations in my own land before travelling to other realm. First and foremost, the main cause of this is to gain a prior experience of travelling within the own comfort zone. In continuation to this notion, it is easy to communicate with people of a similar culture and it is comparatively easier to make arrangements of a trip within own country. Subsequently, it would be easier to get a help in case of an emergency by interacting in a regional language. For example, on a trip to Berlin, if a tourist is stuck at some-place surrounded by local people who can speak the only German language. In these cases, a native speaker can get help very easily. The tips during local would help a lot while travelling outside a country. Moreover, travelling within own country costs less because the domestic mode of transportation is cheaper than international flights and currency values of some countries are lesser than other countries like 1 Canadian dollar costs 50 Indian Rupees. According to a recent survey, only 25% of the Indian population has a passport because most of the people like to travel in their own country first. To recapitulate, in my opinion, travelling within own country first would prove very beneficial for international trips. Local tours can give an experience of time and expense management which could be used in preparing long distance trips.
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people
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Some
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people
like international
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trips
whereas other like to visit the attractions within their
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own
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country
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before
going to a place in another nation. Even, I would
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agree
with the later preference of initial
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travelling
within
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own
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country
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before
going abroad. In this essay, I would discuss my viewpoints with relevant facts and examples that will justify my selection.

There could be
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many
reasons to go to
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different
locations in my
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own
land
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before
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travelling
to other realm.
First
and foremost, the main cause of this is to gain a prior experience of
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travelling
within the
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own
comfort zone. In continuation to this notion, it is easy to communicate with
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people
of a similar culture and it is
comparatively
easier to
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make
arrangements of a
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trip
within
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own
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country
.
Subsequently
, it would be easier to
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get
a
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help
in case of an emergency by interacting in a regional language.
For example
, on a
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trip
to Berlin, if a tourist
is stuck
at
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some
-place surrounded by local
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people
who can speak the
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only
German language. In these cases, a native speaker can
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get
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help
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very
easily
. The tips during local would
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help
a lot while
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travelling
outside a country.

Moreover
,
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travelling
within
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own
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country
costs less
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because
the domestic mode of transportation is cheaper than international flights and currency values of
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some
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countries
are lesser than other
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countries
like 1 Canadian dollar costs 50 Indian Rupees. According to a recent survey,
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only
25% of the Indian population has a passport
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because
most of the
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people
like to travel in their
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own
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country
first
.

To recapitulate, in my opinion,
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travelling
within
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own
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country
first
would prove
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very
beneficial for international
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trips
. Local tours can give an experience of time and expense management which could be
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used
in preparing long distance
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trips
.
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IELTS essay Some people like to travel outside their country. Others would rathertravel to tourist spots in their own country first, before travellingabroad. Which do you prefer to do and why? Include specific detailsand examples to support your choice. v. 8

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
319 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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