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Some people like to travel outside their country. Others would rather travel to tourist spots in their own country first, before travelling abroad. Which do you prefer to do and why? Include specific details and examples to support your choice.

Some people like to travel outside their country. Others would rather travel to tourist spots in their own country first, before travelling abroad. Which do you prefer to do and why? Include specific details and examples to support your choice. 5Rgm
Nowadays a lot of human beings tend to travel abroad, whereas other people would rather visit tourist spots in their countrieson a first place and only after outside of country. I strongly disagree with the given statement. Despite the fact that native people can assist in economical rise of their own country, visiting interesting places all over the world is more beneficial. Substantially, people can play a crucial role in economical raise of their native country by visiting tourism attractions, majority of people have a tendency to visit tourist spots outside of their country. Economy depends on tourists and obviously, if citizens visited touristic places or lived as tourists for some period of time, economy would exceed. A good illustrates for this can be economy of touristic area, such as Maldives which depends on tourism. However, this kind of fact exists, I still heartily disapprove of the given point. It is conspicuous that in the present days, people try to visit as much countries or touristic areas as it is possible, notwithstanding, majority of tourists visit abroad. People can learn numerous number of skills or information by visiting various areas. Furthermore, people who visit other countries can always promote their own country, therefore be useful and advantageous for their hometowns. For instance, having knowledge about different countries or being experienced in some areas can be beneficial in getting job or applying to university. Due to the existence of this kind of facts, I firmly disagree with the given above satement. To conclude everything that has been stated so far, although visiting tourist spots in hometown can be helpful for country ‘s economy, being a tourist in foreign country gives more opportunities and interesting information
Nowadays
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visit
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tourist
spots in their
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first
place and
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country
. I
strongly
disagree with the
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statement. Despite the fact that native
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people
can assist in economical rise of their
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own
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country
, visiting interesting places all over the world is more beneficial.

Substantially
,
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people
can play a crucial role in economical raise of their native
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country
by visiting tourism attractions,
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majority of
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people
have a tendency to
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visit
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tourist
spots
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outside of
their
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country
.
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depends on
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tourists
and
obviously
, if citizens visited touristic places or
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lived
as
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tourists
for
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period of time,
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economy
would exceed. A
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good
illustrates for this can be
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economy
of touristic
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, such
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as Maldives
which depends on tourism.
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, this kind of fact exists, I
still
heartily
disapprove of the
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point.

It is conspicuous that in the present days,
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people
try to
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visit
as
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much
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countries
or touristic
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areas
as it is possible, notwithstanding,
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majority of
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tourists
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visit
abroad.
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People
can learn numerous number of
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skills
or information by visiting various
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areas
.
Furthermore
,
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people
who
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visit
other
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countries
can always promote their
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own
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country
,
therefore
be useful and advantageous for their hometowns.
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, having knowledge about
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different
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countries
or
being experienced
in
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some
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areas
can be beneficial in getting job or applying to university. Due to the existence of this kind of facts, I
firmly
disagree with the
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given
above
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satement
.

To conclude
everything that has
been stated
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far, although visiting
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tourist
spots in hometown can be helpful for
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country
‘s
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economy
, being a
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tourist
in foreign
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country
gives more opportunities and interesting information
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IELTS essay Some people like to travel outside their country. Others would rather travel to tourist spots in their own country first, before travelling abroad. Which do you prefer to do and why? Include specific details and examples to support your choice.

Essay
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4 paragraphs
283 words
6.0
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