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Some people like to record their life by sharing pictures and other information on social networking sites Others keep this information to themselves and never share it online Which do you prefer

Some people like to record their life by sharing pictures and other information on social networking sites Others keep this information to themselves and never share it online Which do you prefer 2bgMo
regarding the fact that people are livig in the modern social life, social media and other social network play a pivotal role among people to access to new data. In other words, people who want to know about each other and have easy access to their news can use the social media. Accordingly, some people assume that social media is not safe place to share the privet information. However, others deisagree. As far as I am concern, one of the certain role of social media could be the way that people know about each other. I feel this way for two reasones which I will explore in the following essay. The first vital point to bear in mind is that, as people are living in the hectic daily life scadule, there is no enough time to visit each other and scajual with the detail plan to see each of their friends and family. Therefore by sharing the pictures of the memory you can send a hint to your friends and make distance connection. Take my personal experience as a compelling example. I had been strugling in executing a new and areduse project in buliding company which did not let us to heve more than litle free time. What was relly obvios was that I liked to share my event with my friiend s and family that were live far from me and the only free means to share the memory was to taking photo and share my memory with them through the social media tools. This example clearly illustrates that how the social media like instogram could be usefull for people to share their memory and access to each other in the far distances. Seconed cricial role that uploding a photo on the social media could reperesents is that, the photo can save as a golory and the memory can gathered and collect in a virtual space that the access to them are available every time that you want. The example of my own experienc exemplifies the correctness of this truth. I had uploded the photoes of my special and memorial event on the privte page on instogrames wall. What is surprisigly shows is that after several years that you pass lots of events I had a collected of my photoes in a subjective albume on instograme's wall. By using this method I could have all my memorial events simultaniosly in a virtual space which have take minscle space on your mobile phone. In conclusion, I firmly agree that uploading the photoes on social media, not only does make the access for friends to commiunicate with each other and invent a pvirtual plac eto know about each others, but also creat a collection of photoes that mis very easy to have access to them.
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life,
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and
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network play a pivotal role among
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to
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words,
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people
who want to know about each
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and have easy
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.
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assume that
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the privet information.
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. As far as I am concern, one of the certain role of
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could be the way that
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know about each
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. I feel this way for two
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which I will explore in the following essay.

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vital point to bear in mind is that, as
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are living in the hectic daily life
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scadule
, there is no
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time to visit each
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and
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with the detail plan to
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each of their friends and family.
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by sharing the pictures of the
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memory
you can
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a hint to your friends and
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distance connection. Take my personal experience as a compelling example. I had been
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project in
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more than
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s and family that were
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far from me and the
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free means to
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the
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and
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my
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with them through the
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tools. This example
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like
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could be
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for
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to
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their
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and
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in the far distances.

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cricial
role that
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a
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could
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reperesents
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can save as a
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and the
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can gathered and collect in a virtual space that the
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exemplifies the correctness of this truth. I had
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photoes
of my special and memorial
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on the
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privte
page on
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instogrames
wall. What is
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is that after several years that you pass lots of
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I had
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my
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photoes
in a subjective
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in a virtual space which have
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, not
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commiunicate
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and invent a
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pvirtual
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know about each
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IELTS essay Some people like to record their life by sharing pictures and other information on social networking sites Others keep this information to themselves and never share it online Which do you prefer

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