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Some people feel that the media influences social behavior, while others feel it simply mirrors it. Discuss both points of view and give your opinion.?

Some people feel that the media influences social behavior, while others feel it simply mirrors it. ? KwYx6
Truly believe with the statement, a certain group of people feel social behaviour is influenced by media, whereas others experience multi-media reflects the society but in current times, in my opinion, the stronger effect of media is seen on the people. In the essay 2 views will be discussed, first how media can impact the thought, feelings and behaviours of the society, and secondly how certain movements fuels media to adopt and embrace it. To begin with, certain trends or hashtags are paving the path of what people are consuming and what sort of mindset is carved in them. For instance, recently a movement called 'Body shaming' began to really trend among multiple social platforms which were promoted by the so-called 'Influencers'. These people began to encourage the concept of loving your own body irrespective of your size, shape and colour. Furthermore, the marketing team hired plus-size models and showed them wearing stylish clothes which disrupted the thought process of the people, and this was enabled by social media platforms. Moreover, there are certain empowering revolutions which begin around women equality and their growth in humanity which was appreciated as well as embraced by the media. For example, the sanitary pads ads and luxury handbags ads begin promoting the idea of women are capable of multi-tasking and equally perform all the tasks like men. Such powerful societal changes have been expressed by the media and have been mirrored upon. However, to conclude with I believe, the media has a larger influence on the people as it has become accessible for people to pose their mindset which feels discussion and begin to trend among the whole society as well as shaping them. Although, it is justifiable that society and media both have abilities to make an impression on each other.
Truly
believe with the statement, a
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certain
group of
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people
feel social
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behaviour
is influenced
by
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media
, whereas others experience multi-media reflects the
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society
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but
in
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current
times, in my opinion, the stronger effect of
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media
is
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seen
on the
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people
. In the essay 2 views will
be discussed
,
first
how
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media
can impact the
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thought
, feelings and
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behaviours
of the
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society
, and
secondly
how
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certain
movements fuels
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media
to adopt and embrace it.

To
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begin
with,
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certain
trends or hashtags are paving the path of what
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
are consuming and what sort of mindset
is carved
in them.
For instance
, recently a movement called 'Body shaming' began to
really
trend among multiple social platforms which
were promoted
by the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
-called 'Influencers'. These
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
began to encourage the concept of loving your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
body irrespective of your size, shape and
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colour
.
Furthermore
, the marketing team hired plus-size models and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
showed
them wearing stylish clothes which disrupted the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
thought
process of the
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people
, and this
was enabled
by social
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media
platforms.

Moreover
, there are
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certain
empowering revolutions which
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begin
around women equality and their growth in humanity which
was appreciated
as well
as embraced by the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
media
.
For example
, the sanitary pads ads and luxury handbags ads
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begin
promoting the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
of women are capable of multi-tasking and
equally
perform all the tasks like
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
men
. Such powerful societal
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changes
have
been expressed
by the
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media
and have
been mirrored
upon.

However
,
to conclude
with I believe, the
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media
has a larger influence on the
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people
as it has become accessible for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
to pose their mindset which feels discussion and
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begin
to trend among the whole
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society
as well
as shaping them. Although, it is justifiable that
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society
and
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media
both have abilities to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
an impression on each other.
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IELTS essay Some people feel that the media influences social behavior, while others feel it simply mirrors it. ?

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