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Some people feel that certain workers like nurses, doctors and teachers are undervalued and should be paid more, especially when other people like film actors or company bosses are paid huge sums of money that are out of proportion to the importance of the work that they do. How far do you agree? What criteria should be used to decide how much people are paid?

Some people feel that certain workers like nurses, doctors and teachers are undervalued and should be paid more, especially when other people like film actors or company bosses are paid huge sums of money that are out of proportion to the importance of the work that they do. How far do you agree? What criteria should be used to decide how much people are paid? dRa2
Few people sense that a number of profession such as nurses, doctors and teachers are crucial part of society yet they paid not so much as film actors or company bosses. My opinion I discuss in an essay. To begin with, teachers, doctors and nurses are the backbone of our society. They are paid low because they works for 30 to 35 years. However, they protect our future and build up our country educated. For instance, the doctor the doctors works 24 hours in this covid-19 pandemic together with they cure patients to put their life in risk. Moreover, teachers plays chief role to grow natures future. As they educated youngsters and they are the future of our country. So it is advisable to paid more to teachers and doctors too. on the other side, film actors or company bosses paid high. Firstly, if we discuss about film actor they entertain people but to entertain us they have to eork hard and they work for day an night. Because of this reasons, it is fair to paid high. Secondly, company's bosses are also paid high due to there position which required responsibility of growth of company. To conclude, in my opinion both proffesions should pay equally as they work hard for country's future.
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sense that a number of profession such as nurses,
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are crucial part of society
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bosses. My opinion I discuss in an essay. To
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with,
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teachers
,
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doctors
and nurses are the backbone of our society. They are
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paid
low
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because
they
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works
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, they protect our
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and build up our country educated.
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, the
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doctor
the
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doctors
works 24 hours in this
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covid-19
pandemic together with they cure patients to put their
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in
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.
Moreover
,
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teachers
plays chief role to grow natures
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. As they educated
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youngsters and
they are the
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of our country.
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it is advisable to
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paid
more to
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and
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too.
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on
the other side, film actors or
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bosses
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high.
Firstly
, if we
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discuss about film
actor they entertain
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to entertain us they
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eork
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for day
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of
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reasons, it is
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to
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paid
high.
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,
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's bosses are
also
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paid
high due to there position which required responsibility of growth of
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company
.
To conclude
, in my opinion both
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proffesions
should pay
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equally as
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for country's
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IELTS essay Some people feel that certain workers like nurses, doctors and teachers are undervalued and should be paid more, especially when other people like film actors or company bosses are paid huge sums of money that are out of proportion to the importance of the work that they do. How far do you agree? What criteria should be used to decide how much people are paid?

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