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Some people feel that boarding schools (where students or pupils live at the school during the term) are an excellent option for children, while other people disagree for a number of reasons. Consider both sides of this debate and reach a conclusion.

Some people feel that boarding schools (where student or pupils live at the school during the term) are an excellent option for children, while other people disagree for a number of reasons. Consider both sides of the debate and reach a conclusion. v. 2
Most parents op to residential schools for their children as they claim that such places can provide much more opportunities than in regular schools. And others, on the contrary, do not agree to send their children to such educational institutions, since they will not be able to be near. These educational centers have their advantages and disadvantages, and in this essay discussing them we can come to a conclusion. On the one hand, when choosing such a school, parents hope that the students will be more disciplined. Boarding school students live a more orderly life than their peers. Moreover, their meal time is set in the same way as their training time, since this is an important part of life and order must be maintained everywhere. In addition, the time of the students should be regulated so that they do not waste their time in vain and learn to use them wisely. For instance, in such places there is a curfew, where children must come from a walk during the time and not stay late. Academic discipline is important for students, as it will help them not only in school life but also in the future to achieve their goals. In contrast, other parents are afraid to send their progeny to a dormitory because they cannot see each other for a long time and will lose control over them. In particular, students can not talk openly with their parents, as they are given little time to talk, which may cause the distance between them to widen. In the future, it will be difficult for them to find a common language because of which various conflicts may appear. Furthermore, parents will not know about what their child is doing and about his condition, because of which they may be worried. There have been many cases where students have been bullied and bullied in such places, and they cannot be sure that this will not happen to their children. In the end, it is up to the parents to decide whether or not to send their children to a boarding school. They must weigh all the pros and cons and make a decision on which the life of students depends.
Most
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parents
op to residential
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schools
for their
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children
as they claim that such places can provide much more opportunities than in regular
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schools
.
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,
on the contrary
, do not
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agree
to
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send
their
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children
to such educational institutions, since they will not be able to be near. These educational centers have their advantages and disadvantages, and in this essay discussing them we can
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come
to a conclusion.

On the one hand, when choosing such a
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school
,
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parents
hope that the
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students
will be more disciplined. Boarding
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school
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students
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live
a more orderly
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life
than their peers.
Moreover
, their meal
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time
is set
in the same way
as their training
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time
, since this is an
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important
part of
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life
and order
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must
be maintained
everywhere.
In addition
, the
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time
of the
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students
should
be regulated
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so
that they do not waste their
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time
in vain and learn to
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use
them
wisely
.
For instance
, in such places there is a curfew, where
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children
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must
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come
from a walk during the
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time
and not stay late. Academic discipline is
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important
for
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students
, as it will
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help
them not
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only
in
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school
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life
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but
also
in the future to achieve their goals.

In contrast
, other
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parents
are afraid to
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send
their progeny to a dormitory
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because
they cannot
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see
each other for a long
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time
and will lose control over them.
In particular
,
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students
can not talk
openly
with their
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parents
, as they are
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given
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little
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time
to talk, which may cause the distance between them to widen.
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In
the future, it will be difficult for them to find a common language
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because
of which various conflicts may appear.
Furthermore
,
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parents
will not know about what their child is doing and about his condition,
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because
of which they may
be worried
. There have been
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many
cases where
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students
have
been bullied
and bullied in such places, and they cannot be sure that this will not happen to their children.

In the
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end
, it is up to the
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parents
to decide
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whether or not
to
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send
their
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children
to a boarding
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school
. They
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must
weigh all the pros and cons and
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make
a decision on which the
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life
of
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students
depends.
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IELTS essay Some people feel that boarding schools (where students or pupils live at the school during the term) are an excellent option for children, while other people disagree for a number of reasons. Consider both sides of this debate and reach a conclusion.

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368 words
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