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Some people claim that the media has a negative influence on contemporary society. They think that there is very little tolerance for new ideas because of its impact. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? v.2

Some people claim that the media has a negative influence on contemporary society. They think that there is very little tolerance for new ideas because of its impact. with this opinion? v. 2
In today' s world, the media is becoming an increasingly influential force. Some people find such development undesirable, as they believe the impact of the media to be entirely negative and unwelcoming of new ideas. However, I disagree with this view. With the following essay, I will elaborate on the reasons supporting my point of view. To begin with, the media fosters tolerance for radically different ways of thinking. The media, in its multitude of forms, provides a gateway for people to learn more about the world around them. Nowadays, everyone is only a handful of mouse clicks or button pushes away from being exposed to verified information about different cultures across the globe. For instance, the emergence of movie rental and video streaming services, such as YouTube or Netflix, has facilitated people' s access to a wide range of high-quality movies and documentaries. Likewise, online music stores and on-demand music streaming services have helped people listen to music from cultures around the world. Therefore, people can learn how their fellow men from distant lands think and perceive the world, creating a more tolerant and diverse society. On top of that, the media can catalyze new and unique trends in society, thus diversifying our culture. The media helps deliver art, music, and other slices of culture to brand new audience sectors. When the newly-exposed audience incorporate these initially foreign ideas into their identity, they will help produce and foster innovative and modern insights and personalities. A notable example of this phenomenon is the cultural exchange between Japanese and American teenagers. Japanese teens have chosen American fashion trends that suit them, melding it with their pre-existing Japanese style in order to create the world-renowned Japanese street style. Conversely, an increasing number of American teens are consuming Japan-made media, such as anime or manga, and afterwards adapting certain ideas and life attitudes of the Japanese people. To sum up, the media increases people' s knowledge of the world and tolerance towards differences in world view, and well as diversifies different cultures. For these reasons, I do not think that the media has a negative influence, nor is it unreceptive to new ideas.
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to be
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negative
and unwelcoming of
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new
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ideas
.
However
, I disagree with this view. With the following essay, I will elaborate on the reasons supporting my point of view.

To
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begin
with, the
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media
fosters tolerance for
radically
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different
ways of thinking. The
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media
, in its multitude of forms,
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provides
a gateway for
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people
to learn more about the
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world
around them. Nowadays, everyone is
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only
a handful of mouse clicks or button pushes away from
being exposed
to verified information about
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different
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cultures
across the globe.
For instance
, the emergence of movie rental and video streaming services, such as YouTube or Netflix, has facilitated
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people&
#039; s access to a wide range of high-quality movies and documentaries.
Likewise
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music
stores and on-demand
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music
streaming services have
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helped
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listen to
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from
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cultures
around the
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world
.
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,
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can learn how their fellow
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men
from distant lands
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think
and perceive the
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world
, creating a more tolerant and diverse society.

On top of that
, the
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media
can catalyze
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new
and unique trends in society,
thus
diversifying our
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culture
. The
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media
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helps
deliver art,
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music
, and other slices of
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culture
to brand
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new
audience sectors. When the
newly
-exposed audience incorporate these
initially
foreign
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ideas
into their identity, they will
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help
produce and foster innovative and modern insights and personalities. A notable example of this phenomenon is the cultural exchange between Japanese and American
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teenagers
. Japanese teens have chosen American fashion trends that suit them, melding it with their pre-existing Japanese style in order to create the world-renowned Japanese street style.
Conversely
, an increasing number of American teens are consuming Japan-made
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media
, such as anime or manga, and afterwards adapting certain
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ideas
and life attitudes of the Japanese
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people
.

To sum up, the
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media
increases
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people&
#039; s knowledge of the
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world
and tolerance towards differences in
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world
view, and well as diversifies
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different
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cultures
. For these reasons, I do not
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think
that the
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media
has a
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negative
influence, nor is it
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unreceptive
to
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new
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ideas
.
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38Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people claim that the media has a negative influence on contemporary society. They think that there is very little tolerance for new ideas because of its impact. with this opinion? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
360 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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