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Nowadays, the designs of the buildings in the community are affected by other cultures. This results in loss of cultural identity of the structures in the community. People would claim that buildings should be built using a traditional style for the prote v.3

Nowadays, the designs of the buildings in the community are affected by other cultures. This results in loss of cultural identity of the structures in the community. People would claim that buildings should be built using a traditional style for the prote v. 3
With the advancement in modern architecture, some are of the belief that it is not important anymore to make buildings that will show the culture of the society where they are built. However, I am of the opinion that the design of the buildings must reflect the cultural identity of the city. The city’s cultural identity must be inculcated in every piece of architectural work as it do not only stand as the heart of the town but also symbolizes the history of the place and how it came to be. Apart from that, the distinct features of every building can stand as the heritage of the city just like most of the cities in China where they build infrastructures that show the culture of their cities. In fact, it is known as one of the countries where its people build establishments that reflect the never-ending loyalty and support to it. Furthermore, creativity in the innovative design of the buildings are showcased because architects and engineers are able to get to know more about the history of the region. In addition to this, they become fully aware of the implications of the designs they are going to make and in the process of making them, they will prevent themselves from making an output that they may regret in the end. These results in them becoming culturally sensitive and able to respect the people and its heritage. To conclude, although modernization can provide creativity with how buildings are made, I am one of those who think that these should be built according to the city’s cultural identity. It does not only reflect the region and the people but it also preserves their history.
With the advancement in modern architecture,
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some
are of the belief that it is not
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important
anymore to
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make
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buildings
that will
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show
the culture of the society where they
are built
.
However
, I am of the opinion that the design of the
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buildings
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
reflect the cultural identity of the city.

The city’s cultural identity
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must
be inculcated
in every piece of architectural work as it do not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
stand as the heart of the town
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but
also
symbolizes the history of the place and how it came to be. Apart from that, the distinct features of every
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building
can stand as the heritage of the city
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
like most of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cities
in China where they build infrastructures that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
the culture of their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cities
. In fact, it
is known
as one of the countries where its
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
build establishments that reflect the never-ending loyalty and support to it.

Furthermore
, creativity in the innovative design of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
buildings
are showcased
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
architects and engineers are able to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
to know more about the history of the region.
In addition
to this, they become
fully
aware of the implications of the designs they are going to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
and in the process of making them, they will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevent
themselves from making an output that they may regret in the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
. These results in them becoming
culturally
sensitive and able to respect the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
and its heritage.

To conclude
, although modernization can provide creativity with how
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
buildings
are made
, I am one of those who
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that these should
be built
according to the city’s cultural identity. It does not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
reflect the region and the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
it
also
preserves their history.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay Nowadays, the designs of the buildings in the community are affected by other cultures. This results in loss of cultural identity of the structures in the community. People would claim that buildings should be built using a traditional style for the prote v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
282 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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