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Some people believes it is better to visit well known places whereas other belives it better to go on different place discuss both views and give your opinions.

Some people believes it is better to visit well known places whereas other belives it better to go on different place Pk5Md
Well a masses of people believes it is comfortable to be visit same places whereas others believes there is need explore more beautiful and challenging destinations. Whereas, I am in the accordance to going well known places is better than new one’s and the reasons will be discussed in the upcoming paragraphs. While, a large section of society that it is good to be going on known places where chances of fraud are very less for them because they are very friendly with the environment of that particular place or even they get peace in that environment because they are well connected. To cite an epitome, In summer my whole always going to himachal pradesh for to spent summer holidays as we are very well introduced to there culture and it is very for us adapt ourselves in that environment. While, when we visit in new places the environment is totally new for us and sometimes due to that we need to face problems Whereas, others believes it is best to explore new destinations rather than old ones because new one developed your interest or excitement level which your never get in exploring old one’s. For example, Acc to a survey European nations people mostly visits in Asian countries for to spend holidays as it is a new place for them to see. To recapitulate, I strictly believe that it okay to be visit well known places for tourist purpose as we are well known about the culture of that particular place rather than visiting in new one’s.
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known
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places
is better than
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one’s and the reasons will
be discussed
in the upcoming paragraphs.

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, a large section of society that it is
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good
to be going on
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known
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places
where chances of

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environment
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place
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peace in that
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environment
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well connected
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himachal pradesh
for to spent summer holidays as we are
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introduced to there culture and it is
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very
for us adapt ourselves in that
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environment
. While, when we
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in
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new
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places
the
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environment
is
totally
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new
for us and
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sometimes
due to that we need to face problems

Whereas, others
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believes
it is best to explore
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new
destinations
rather
than
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old
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ones
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because
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one developed your interest or excitement level which your never
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get
in exploring
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old
one’s.
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Acc
to a survey European nations
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people
mostly
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visits
in Asian countries for to spend holidays as it is a
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new
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place
for them to
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see
.

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strictly
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believe
that it okay to be
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visit
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well
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known
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places
for tourist purpose as we are
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well
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known
about the culture of that particular
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place
rather
than visiting in
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new
one’s.
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IELTS essay Some people believes it is better to visit well known places whereas other belives it better to go on different place

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
258 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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