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Some people believe watching television is beneficial for students. To what extend do you agree or disagree with the statement?

Some people believe watching television is beneficial for students. with the statement? 55Ekm
Nowadays, television is a critical rule in our life. certain individuals think that watching television is merit for learners. I hold a balanced view regarding this notion which I am going to hash out in subsequent paragraphs. To set the ball rolling, there are two print reasons why watching television is beneficial for pupils. firstly, TV is a good source of entertainment. Students can relax, minds fresh, remove stress levels and have a lot of fun by watching comedy shows, cartoons and songs. Secondly, television programs enhance their academic scores. For example, if the learners watch shows like KBC, program of national geography and history channel. As well as they can boost their knowledge and get a good scores in their examinations. However, on the other hand, it can not be ignored that there are some drawbacks of watching television. First of all, if the pupils watch tv in a long hours. They are more suffer from health problems. If the students spend prolong hours on watching TV. which can cause of obesity and weak eyesight. secondary, if the students watch TV in a regular basis. they can not spend time with their parents and friends. They can not share their emotion, plan, sorrows and joys with their family members. which can cause growth to the widden gab with their family members and friends. In conclusion, although there are a lot of benefits of watching television. TV shows educate and entertain the students. However, there are few negative impacts on health and can not spend time with their parents.
Nowadays,
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television
is a critical
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rule
in our life.
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certain
individuals
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think
that watching
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television
is merit for learners. I hold a balanced view regarding this notion which I am going to hash out in subsequent paragraphs. To set the ball rolling, there are two print reasons why watching
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television
is beneficial for pupils.
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firstly
, TV is a
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good
source of entertainment.
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Students
can relax, minds fresh, remove
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stress
levels and have
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a lot of
fun by watching comedy
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shows
, cartoons and songs.
Secondly
,
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television
programs enhance their academic scores.
For example
, if the learners
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watch
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shows
like
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KBC
, program of national geography and history channel.
As well
as they can boost their knowledge and
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get
a
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good
scores in their examinations.
However
,
on the other hand
, it can not be
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ignored
that there are
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some
drawbacks of watching
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television
.
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First of all
, if the pupils
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watch
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tv
in a long
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hours
. They are more suffer from health problems. If the
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students
spend prolong hours on watching TV. which can cause of obesity and weak eyesight.
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secondary
, if the
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students
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watch
TV in a regular basis.
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they
can not spend time with their parents and friends. They can not share their emotion, plan, sorrows and joys with their family members.
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which
can cause growth to the
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widden
gab with their family members and friends.
In conclusion
, although there are
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a lot of
benefits of watching
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television
. TV
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shows
educate and entertain the
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students
.
However
, there are few
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negative
impacts on health and can not spend time with their parents.
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IELTS essay Some people believe watching television is beneficial for students. with the statement?

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  American English
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259 words
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