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Some people believe the aim of university education is to help graduates get better jobs. Others believe there are much wider benefits of university education for both individuals and society. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people believe the aim of university education is to help graduates get better jobs. Others believe there are much wider benefits of university education for both individuals and society. ljW6w
There is no doubt that the university education plays a significant role students’ growth as individuals, and their role in the society in the future. Though, I believe that the higher education does not only attract better opportunities to work but also provide further opportunities in life those benefit the society directly and indirectly. I will discuss both the sides of the matter in this essay. First and foremost, the higher education molds students with a wide knowledge, and the skills required to perform the tasks better than individuals who could not complete the higher education. Businesses will always prefer to hire graduates for the work for a specific discipline which give graduates an edge competing with candidates without a university degree. For an example, a software development company will choose a graduate in computer science over a candidate who learnt to build software by its own. In my view, the higher education plays a vital role in building a society with all the facilities, and people with numerous specialties. The education of medical science, engineering, accounting, and business, etc. can be attained from the universities only, and a society without aforementioned specialties may suffer in its development and survival. University education gives little extra confidence to individuals because their future opportunities will be supported by their completed education. In conclusion, there is no debate about that the higher education gives more chances and number of opportunities to graduates, but the role of higher education is far more than a better job since it builds a better society with all the needs and requirements for human survival.
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university
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education
plays a significant
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role
students’ growth as individuals, and their
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role
in the
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society
in the future. Though, I believe that the higher
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education
does not
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only
attract
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better
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opportunities
to work
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but
also
provide
further
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opportunities
in life those benefit the
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society
directly
and
indirectly
. I will discuss both the sides of the matter in this essay.

First
and foremost, the higher
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education
molds students with a wide knowledge, and the
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skills
required to perform the tasks
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better
than individuals who could not complete the higher
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education
. Businesses will always prefer to hire
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graduates
for the work for a specific discipline which give
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graduates
an edge competing with candidates without a
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university
degree. For an example, a software development
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company
will choose a
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graduate
in computer science over a candidate who
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learnt
to build software by its
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own
.

In my view, the higher
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education
plays a vital
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role
in building a
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society
with all the facilities, and
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people
with numerous specialties. The
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education
of medical science, engineering, accounting, and business, etc. can
be attained
from the
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universities
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only
, and a
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society
without aforementioned specialties may suffer in its development and survival.
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University
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education
gives
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little
extra confidence to individuals
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because
their future
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opportunities
will
be supported
by their completed education.

In conclusion
, there is no debate about that the higher
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education
gives more chances and number of
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opportunities
to
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graduates
,
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but
the
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role
of higher
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education
is far more than a
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better
job since it builds a
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better
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society
with all the needs and requirements for human survival.
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IELTS essay Some people believe the aim of university education is to help graduates get better jobs. Others believe there are much wider benefits of university education for both individuals and society.

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4 paragraphs
267 words
6.0
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